As I look at myself in
the mirror,I start to cry
from a broken heart.
A broken soul.
Why?
Why must I slash at my
Arms and wrists.
Is it for the pain or the
rush?
My slashing stays hushed.
I cry from the abuse I
Inflict upon muself.
My eyes are now hollow from
losing myself in the pain.
The scars stain my skin.
I hate what I see in the mirror.
The scars of my pain
rain down upon me.
As i look in the mirror
with a knife in my hand;
am I what God planned?
Slashing my arms and my writsts,
tears of blood hit the ground
without making a sound.
The scars stain my soul as
my soul withers and die.
Author notes
option 2
A contest entry
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Comments
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very good write, but i'm dq-ing your poem because you didn't follow the rules
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excellent poem, it is very sad, it suited the option well i must say,
good luck in the contest
keep writing
~Ashley~<3 -
very sad.... i hope that you are writing as a third person and not about yourself, but if you are know that you are not alone, many people including myself have struggled with this. keep writing, getting your feelings out. however, this is not dirty pretty, it is not written in the right format. thanks for sharing though.
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i've been cutting for about four years now. everytime i do im so ashamed of myself and my scars.you did an amazing job, good luck in the contest and good luck in life.
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This is a very deep poem. It seems as if you put your soul in this poem for others to see. I really like it, but you shouldn't hurt yourself no matter what pain your feeling. Great job.
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i like this one. u have a good planning on it. like, u know what ur going to write, the words just come to me and i write it down on my poems. and this one, it could b turned into a song, if u repeat the "Slashing my arms and wrists" phrase.
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very sad
yet this is problem for some people.
it is describe in a great rhyming pattern -
very arresting - I say don't slash yourself - slash the mirror!
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THIS WAS VERY INTENSE. I COULD SEE THE DEEP PAIN OF IT ALL. IT REALLY WAS KIND OF SCARY FOR ME. DO YOU EVER WRITE ANYTHING JOYFUL ...LOL.
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very cool, intense, i like the repeated use of slashing
i would switch the last word to 'dies' not die though
other than that it's very good
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