Exquisite bark ripened,
Passionate and bare
Leaves of allurement
Fresh as crisp air
Branches waving in tranquil,
Self meditation
Roots covered in bliss
With no limitation
A contest entry
- biggest contest in allpoetry history! (i hope) need 1,000 entries!! by Gasp.
1300 points, ended July 11, 2007, 638 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Send Me A Poem by crystallynnbradford.
400 points, ended November 9, 2007, 52 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i like the originality in this piece...It was a very good read and I enjoyed it very much...thanks for entering and good luck in the contest
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Windy
Gorgeous write. I feel a lively talk amongst the trees. A considerable mentioning of life without ever owning any real invention of man. A true source of a limitless earth and desirable perch for the great cosmic mother's birds.
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juicy
its very well rounded, i like every thing but the fourth line of both stanzas, fresh and crisp sort of give me the same feeling, not a very original comparison. I wouldnt go so far as to call the rhyme 'force' but i can tell it definatly shaped the piece. -
damn, id like a tire swing in that tree. i dont know if its just me or that you havent posted anything lately. Pulchritudinous... love that word bitch.
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O-well... I am over it :)
This one guy was harassing me and he was putting down all of my poems... and when her insulted -Pulchritudinous Utopian- I got so upset... I think it is one of my best!!! But whatever... I love this piece.
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this is WONDEROUS!!! i say that to a lot of people, lol, but to you i REALLY mean it!!! i cant really understand all of your wording, but its like reading another language which i quite enjoy, and it still sounds beautiful even if i cant understand every word. nice!
"Exquisite bark ripened,
Passionate and bare
Leaves of allurement
Fresh as crisp air"
I am starting to get the jist of it after i read over a couple of times. i also love your rhyming scheme! -
pheremones
the venerable image of a tree of life is a metaphor that sprouts in my young mind. mankind must procreate somehow and it is through the tree of life, the beauty of love making expression is exposed, where the roots of time have been covered in bliss. there is no limitation to the possible lineage where procreation gets tiring from generation to generation. this tree of life imagery is well thought and intellectually stimulating and arrousing at the same time. great write. my name is "sublime" and it is my third day on allpoetry. i enjoy the title and your choice of diction with the word pulchritudinous, because it is one of my favorite words. wanna be allpoetry friends?
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Sounds like a beautiful place, you chose words that explained it wonderfully and those few words was all that was needed good job.
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Wonderful!!
I am not sure what the first word is in the title lol as you are talking to an oldie here lol but this really gave me a vivid picture of peace and tranquility. A beautiful feeling of clean, quiteness. I hope I am not off track here.
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