Too Much Has Happened
Maybe If I Drown?
I Would Cleanse.
The Water Would Mirror My Alleged Emotions.
Still.
Still There.
Still Remembered.
Still Raw.
Things Are Different.
But They Remain Unchanged.
You Left.
You Killed
The Most Innocent Part Of Me.
You Left Me.
But You Took Me With You.
A contest entry
- Dramatic Monologue by Andantino.
475 points, ended May 21, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This works very well, although concise it still delivers its mood and impact. However, capitalizing every word in a poem I find rather affected and distracting.
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Welcome to AP
the contradiction at the end really is my favorite part. "You Left Me.
But You Took Me With You." a sad tale.
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It's beautiful...sad, but it seems like you are holding back.
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