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Hebrews 11:1

Hebrews 11:1

Faith is the substance of things hoped for
the light of the Lord that opens the door
Revealing the light of heaven serene
the evidence of things not seen

My God has revealed the evidence 
His glorious power with consequence 

Healing me and making me clean
the evidence of things not seen

Faith in Christ without reservation
relieved the pain of my aberration
So open His book to see what I mean
the evidence of things not seen

Faith is the substance of things hoped for
the evidence of things not seen

 

 

 

 

Author notes


Amera

 

A Kyrielle Sonnet consists of 14 lines (three rhyming quatrain stanzas and a non-rhyming couplet). Just like the traditional Kyrielle poem, the Kyrielle Sonnet also has a repeating line or phrase as a refrain (usually appearing as the last line of each stanza). Each line within the Kyrielle Sonnet consists of only eight syllables. French poetry forms have a tendency to link back to the beginning of the poem, so common practice is to use the first and last line of the first quatrain as the ending couplet. This would also re-enforce the refrain within the poem. Therefore, a good rhyming scheme
for a Kyrielle Sonnet would be:

AabB, ccbB, ddbB, AB -or- AbaB, cbcB, dbdB, AB

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  • katiethepirate
    December 30
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    I really liked the rhyme in this and I thought it flowed very well. Thanks for sharing!

  • melphleg gold member
    October 20

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    I'm impressed not only with the form but also how you interpret and apply Hebrews 11:1. Nicely done.

  • BookGirl
    July 31

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    Lovely! I love the text, and I like what you did with it.
    Here are a couple of possible type-o's I noticed:
    S1, L3: "Reveling the light of heaven serene" Did you mean "revealing the light..."?
    S3, L2: "releaved the pain of my aberration" Shouldn't that be "relieved the pain...:?

  • creationsfromheart silver member
    May 7
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    beautiful Amera I love this it is so light yet strong ! Great write on the verse.


  • myrataal silver member
    April 10

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    Wonderful work ...

    inspired by Divine words. And yes -- one does not need a Muse with the Bible at hand.

    Congratulations on your gold!

    Love
    Myra


  • BellaD
    March 3

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    Beautiful!

    This sonnet is gorgeous and conveys a beautiful message or faith. Congrats on the well-deserved Gold.

  • Ithica silver member
    December 13, 2007

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    Another stellar poem!!! Funny thing, my bible hasn't made up here with me yet (storage locker in Oregon still) So I JUST bought an inexpensive one the other day... So I can open it a little more often...

  • Kim6
    September 17, 2007
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    Very good write. I like the towards the end.

  • Mansoor
    August 8, 2007

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    Oh Almighty! This is beyond words, it has such an intense beauty with it. Your words and imaggery are a beauty!!! This lines keep gettin hold ov me Faith is the substance of things hoped for the evidence of things not seen. I really love this poem, u just made my day Amera

    love,
    Mansoor


  • earthstar
    July 12, 2007

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    This is lovely. The combination of forms are stunning in the impact it creates,very simple elegant. The breath of this write is far more then words. Faith is not an easy word to write about. You have given it deep and a feeling of substance. I truly love it from start to finish. This is a wonderful tribute to faith. We sometimes forget it in todays world. Great job with this write.

  • Never Fall in Love gold member
    June 24, 2007

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    The more I read something from you,
    The more I become aware of the talent you posess.
    I can't really say much about the content of this poem.
    I can't say if I believe it or not; if I agree with it or not; if my own views are different or not.
    I just cannot say.
    Simply because I don't know where I stand.
    But I do respect your views.
    I'm just wondering on the syllable count..
    Either I'm counting all wrong, or maybe you've played with the syllable count a bit.
    It could be the former seeing how strained I feel at the moment.
    I can't even get my thoughts straight.
    What I really really like is how those two lines in the end came together so perfectly...
    It's simply beautiful.
    Keep it all up

    Love ya,
    NeveR ♥


  • second-born
    June 17, 2007

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    oh yes...I also love that Bible verse...when everything seems to go wrong...that verse would really pick me up from sadness...and make me believe once again in God...thank you for sharing your uplifting poem with me...you are truly an amazing writer...

  • maa gold member
    June 14, 2007

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    congratulations, dear sister !
    I am so proud of you !!!

    marion

  • maa gold member
    June 14, 2007
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    a very beautiful poem in message and form, my dear sister ... what a wonderful synchronicity, that we both ended up entering a contest which only accepted three entries : yours, mine and another one ... this is amazing ... I wish you all the best, and would be happy for you if you were chosen the lucky winner ...


    much love,
    marion


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 8, 2007
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    Awesome, printed....


  • RT michaels
    June 6, 2007

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    very elegant. You write it in the same serenity that goes within the bible itself. You use majestic terms and hopeful phrases that add up to a magnificent poem.

    In particular, i liked the repetition of the quoted verse. Through each stanza, problems are washed clean and with simple repeating the troubles of the world vanish. It is remarkable how you can change such a small quote into something so meaningful and applicant.

    i have no quarrels with poem and if I did i would pretend i didn't so i may keep the poem as is. It remains perfect as it is, leaving me mystified at your talent. Thank you for entering, I enjoyed it immensely.

    • Amera gold member
      June 6, 2007
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      Thank you so much. That's really a very nice comment.

      Love,
      Amera♥

  • Candy6
    June 3, 2007
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    very well written poem. This is also a great passage. I enjoy reading your heartfelt poems.

  • Foxydaze14
    May 22, 2007

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    Very beautiful and touching. I really like this piece. You wrote it so beautifully. You did an excellent job. Good luck in the contest!

  • Swan song gold member
    May 13, 2007
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    That is a wonderful poem Boy you can go from one extreme to the other.


  • Autumn-Blush
    May 4, 2007
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    A lovely entry, thank you.

  • Rose Angel gold member
    April 28, 2007

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    Bravo.....Lovely Sonnet of Faith!

    Amera....this sonnet,,so simple it makes what faith is all about..yet, so beautiful..and so needed in these days...The background is so gentle as you are and the scripture the way you have written it...faith quietly moving in us is like a mighty earthquake starting to rumble way down inside to bring"the mountains down and move as He (Our master and Lord Jesus said).Thanks for this witness...And how God honored you with the Gold...She our dear Kristin loved it too! We need reaffirm one another with these precious words..Bravo!


  • Twins 4 me
    April 18, 2007

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    Awesome! Ilove that scripture! Faith is the whole meaning of christianity! Great write! I could tell you were a christian by your write! You write beautifully! God Bless! Congrats on the gold win!


  • CountryCousin
    April 8, 2007

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    Amazing.

    You took a poetic form and used scripture to write a powerful piece. This was wonderful to read and enjoy tonight especially since it is Easter.

  • pattyann4500
    April 5, 2007

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    Very lovely indeed, not just the poem, but also the way it is presented. (I stole your background, but let me know if you want it back )

    You have given such a beautiful version of how you read your chosen verse. Coupling it with the breathtaking form of the Kyrielle Sonnet, it is even more lovely.

    Thank you so much for entering and good luck in the contest. Hugs, Patricia

  • roses on fire
    April 5, 2007

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    thank you thank you!

    this is soooooooooooooooooo beautiful i am shedding tears of pure love and joy thank you!
    love your faitherz!


  • Dalaney gold member
    March 29, 2007
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    very beautiful and full of
    thought...I like this poem,
    Amera...It soothed me.


  • Desire gold member
    March 29, 2007

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    Powerful-

    Powerful piece You have penned my Friend
    Love the images You bring forth for one cannot help but feel Loving energy~
    Thank You for sharing this with us!
    Magnificent form too
    Woooooooo hoooooooooo~

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • mysticstorm gold member
    March 29, 2007

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    Blind faith. You have written this with such elegance and grace, so befitting to the verse you chose.
    Very beautiful form and flow, it reads so soft and reasurring. Would make anyone feel at home and safe.
    Well done, dear poet!


  • Spiritvision angel gold member
    March 29, 2007
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    Wonderful my dear friend. Just wonderful and the background is fitting as well...


  • thelordreigns gold member
    March 29, 2007

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    An important message

    Thank you for reviving this Scripture to me today. Faith is such an incredible miracle.

    I think perhaps the poem would read better without the "iths" simply because of the antiquated language. If you do leave this language, I think you need to change the iths to eths.....do you mean reveal or revile in line 7?

    This is a very enjoyable kyrielle!
    - joanne

  • JohnnyD gold member
    March 29, 2007

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    Faith is the substance of things hoped for the evidence of things not seen

    "Love is the substance of things needed
    for sustenance of thy soul,
    evidence of which dwells in thy heart
    and exuded by thy eyes
    as sighs"

    love

    Dad


  • jjbreunig3
    March 29, 2007
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    An enjoyable piece...

    An enjoyable piece; I wish you well in the contest. --Joe

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