As I lay on the panel
In the hospital bed
I heard them tell my family
Of a hardship keg
I had sat in the bar
A night of sadness
A drunk in the car
I drove through the streets
Until I came to the back run
I hit a car going 60
While I thought I was having fun
I felt the impact hit my neck
As I began to daze
Now I lay on a panel
Stiff and with outfeeling for the rest of my days
I won't ever again
Feel the touch of my hand
A real hardship band
I feel in the sand
My toes won't feel the water
I shall never know birth
I won't have a child
cause I got drunk on the road
Again I wish
It had never happened
Now it never will again
For I lay still in a hospital bed
Author notes
Don't drink and drive! BE SMART!!
A contest entry
- Titles For Everyone!!! by AllYoullNeverHave.
450 points, ended April 13, 2007, 23 entries
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This poem hit home! WOW!
Wow! This poem really touched me. I am very addicted to alcohol. Your poem really touched the heart. This is one of the best writes. I know I've got to slow down on my drinking (I'm only 16) and I know I shouldn't drink and drive, but I have. Now I regret it and I surely won't happen again! AWESOME WRITE!!!
~J09~
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Wow
i love the powerful message this sends out
very hardhitting.
A really good write
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This is good.... really good. I like the message it conveys... I'm a very much against drinking and driving... I love this, the way you conveyed the things that driving drunk can cause is wonderful. Great job! Thanks for entering! Good luck!
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Great, it's a great story. The message is meanful and smart.
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