The Most Beautiful End.
In the center of a room sits a teen. She’s all alone. Everyone is asleep.
*She puts a gun to her head*
In her own head comes a countdown for who she cares for.
10 - I love you Devyn.
9 - I love you Brytnie.
8 - I love you Lacy.
7 - I love you Mom.
6 - I love you Dad.
5 - I love you Natalie
4 - I love you Eli.
3 - I love you Darci.
2 - I love you Fuzzy.
1 – I love you Richard.
I’m sorry.
*BOOM*
The most beautiful end to the most beautiful lie that was strung over the most beautiful existence in the least beautiful broken girl.
A contest entry
- Story time (tell me a story with blood or love) by Nadala.
450 points, ended April 7, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Oh my God
this is so Well written
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But i must say Please don't do any thing like that -
What a nice start to the contest. A great poem in an impressive structure very nice
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Clever
Very creative. Nice ending. Good luck in the contest.
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Wo0ow this was really good. I really think this will win. Wo0ow so touching and yet so painful. NICE!
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Eesh It's wonderful!
I love it, it's so sad but it's beautiful! I love you too lil sis!
-Eli
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I really liked it cuz its nice and depresseing.all i have seen so far today is happy stuff.but i was wondering in line two that if you meant that she was alone because everyone was asleep?The first time i read it i got the impression that nobody else was in the room with her.and the second time i read it i thought that she was alone in a room of a huse and everybody else was asleep in the other rooms.so i was just wondering and good luck in the contest.
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