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Love Lingers

You from my soul I now must purge

for with you still here I am lost

thoughts freeze my brain like winter's frost

 

 

I sit dangling there on the verge

fading away so very fast

lamenting love that could not last

 

 

Shockingly through my mind you surge

electrifying my senses

breaking down all my defenses

 

From my dreams you must soon emerge

allow me to escape your grasp

free me from the bond of love's clasp

 

Our hearts no longer can converge

upon mine you still seek to tread

as memories of you I dread

 

I pray to  lose this burning urge

leave me, please let me breathe again

to love you so must be a sin

 

In your eyes, ever  to submerge

drowning in passions unspoken

deliver me from vows broken

 

 

                                                    Marjorie  Joyce  Leslie

                                                    03/29/07

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  • Diamond
    January 15

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    So beauitful and yet so sad. It tears at the heart strings but the overall beauty of the poem is stunning. Avril


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    January 3

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    Beautifully writen... strong yet sadness prevails at the end... I love the line...deliver me from vows broken... superb!

    becca


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    November 6, 2008

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    excellent~

    Penned beautiful
    But so sad
    Best of luck in the contest
    I have up a new one drop by too see me when ya can
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


  • Ancientson
    November 23, 2007
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    Superb!!!

    I truly feel the passion and lack thereof in your verse, Most Royal Lady,


  • LdyBrknWing gold member
    August 6, 2007

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    Stunning...heartbreaking

    My sweet friend...what can I say to your beautiful and inspired words? My heart breaks as I read this...not only for you, dear one, but myself, as well, as I've been in this same sad place, as I suppose we all have, at one time, or another. Your words touched my heart so deeply, and brought back painful memories; and yet, I'm now blessed to have someone who has healed my heart, and resurrected my soul. I trust that, for you, too, soon, you'll find the same happiness and joy that I've been blessed with. As always...what beauty in your words...what emotions you invoke...what awesome poetry.
    Paula


  • astralshepherd gold member
    June 4, 2007

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    this is a marvelous poem when read aloud, gentle rhymes, easy flow and so much emotion tied to every stanza. wonderfully made, tearfully read. blessings and best wishes, ~richard


  • Maureen silver member
    April 20, 2007
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    Well done!

    Very emotional poem! Great rhymes! Loved it!

    ♥ Maureen


  • poetryality silver member
    March 31, 2007

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    Beautiful!

    This is sad, melancholy even but very beautiful. I love the form. Must try my hand at it. I like practicing new forms. It is haunting to have to let go sometimes but as the old saying goes; "if you love someone, let them go, if they return...

    Very cleverly penned with a the strain of love relationships that are all to familiar. I wish you well in the challenge my sister/friend.


    Always ♥

    Renee

  • Bob Fox silver member
    March 30, 2007

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    Whether we believ this or not uu a truly A wondeful writter. You desires and passion comes out in every delicious line. To be loved.. Fantastic & ty for your kind comments

  • Bob Fox silver member
    March 30, 2007

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    Marjorie

    Whether we believ this or not uu a truly A wondeful writter. You desires and passion comes out in every delicious line. To be loved.. Fantastic


  • Sai Babas Lotus
    March 29, 2007

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    Ohhhh....this touched me in a special way because since the last 2-3 days I have been missing someone I longed to spend the rest of my life with and whom I know I may never meet Every line of your poem resonated deeply within me. Wonderful alliteration in the title and poem. Excellent assonance too. The monorhyme is beautiful. Lovely rhymes and rhythm.

    All the best,
    Charishma


  • going nowhere
    March 29, 2007
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    Incredible piece. The gentle flow pulled out the soft sadness of this write. Great job.


  • Samplette gold member
    March 29, 2007

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    A beautifully done constanza. Great imagery laced throughout. A great job. Thank you for entering the contest.
    Sam


  • Musimwa
    March 29, 2007

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    Great

    Dear friend and poet, thank u for sharing such a beautiful poem. I love it. It has touched me. U know what, i found more meaning and inspiration in your works, Keep this up. Bravo

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