Sorry
I'm so sorry
My friend
I didn't want to go
But i couldn't hold on
I slipped again
I fell and bruised my knee
I felt the world on my shoulders
The crushing force weighing me down
Too much to bear
I couldn't hold the burden
I found the loaded gun
Thought about it
Weighed the ups and downs
Almost didn't do it
But I couldn't go on
Couldn't go back to life
The one I lived
Was to hard
I was never happy
Couldn't keep it going
Never amounted to anything
I did what god wouldn't
I took that gun
And i ended it all
Goodbye my friend
I'll be watching you
Missing you everyday
Author notes
Goodbye
A contest entry
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Comments
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i loved this peice good job
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Oh. This is... very direct. Seems like a suicide note. In this case, your concise style is perfect. "It was to much" should be "it was too much". I've noticed a lot of people have difficulty distinguishing "to" from "too".
Good job.
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awsome writing with this one! Good Luck in the Contest!
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This is so full of emotion! I love it...good luck in the contest
love alwayz n foreva
~:~SK~:~
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