I am not gone
just a whisper away.
I am not gone
simply resting in the clouds
peaceful and at play.
I am not gone
just a memory away.
I am not gone
as long as you think of me
just a little bit each day.
A contest entry
- design your own epitatph by Dull Red.
340 points, ended May 4, 2007, 47 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Such truth in this
Yes I too have loved ones I have lost recently and I truly feel when they are near and within that thought I whisper I love you to .
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Cool write. I like the "design your own epitaph" concept. This was really light and soothing. The repitition works well for the piece even tho it's short. I really feel bad cause I'm so behind on your work!! Anyway, this was a beautiful write and as always your work touches people directly to the heart.
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comforting
just an example of how a poem of few words can say so much! -
Great job winning the silver. Like the poem and the title you have come up with. Love how it is like a whisper in your words.
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This is just beautiful! Love the ...just a whisper away. Really love all of this!
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Simple, but oh so beautifully penned
Well done and best of luck to you in this contest 
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i agree with your previous comments- very beautiful and emotional. this had wonderful truth in it as well.
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This piece was truly beautiful, the wording, the meaning, everything. It is something i can very personally relate to as well. Excellent write, keep it up!
~NeverLoseHope
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This is a beautiful consoling piece. Well written with great comfort. Reminding that one is never more than a thought or memory away. Well done on this and best of luck to you in the contest.
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This is so beautiful and a wonderful reminder
of just how much we can keep those alive that have
passed on in our hearts, by just remembering them.
Wonderful work here and thanks for sharing it!
Best of luck to you with this in the contest!
Jeremy0826 -
beautiful
a very sweet and touching little piece i love it simplicity that states it all very very well done again just a beautiful piece
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Wow, I seriously love this. I wouldnt mind using it on my own headstone!
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poem with a taste
very very nice words and catchy to remember for ever
it is apeculiar contest and best of luck to the poet
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I like it flows well is simple yet it says so much beautiful yet full of truth. We all are born to die cant get away from it and the sorrow and pain we hold for those who have gone is ours to bear. To die is a release from life but if we are loved and held in memory our life is held onto by the threads of memories. You keep those you love in your heart where they live on forever in you till your number is called and on it goes. Thank you for the pleasure of this briliantly worded post.
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good
this would be a very comforting thing to leave for loved ones. It is a gift they can always keep. -
very good
very lovely written well for such a short epitatph keep up te great writing
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lovely. just absolutely lovely. sad. loved these lines.
beautiful.
I am not gone
simply resting in the clouds
peaceful and at play.
I am not gone
just a memory away.
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I love this, it is beautiful, and it is sad. I feel the pain of the sadness that you wrote. However I also feel the memories of what would be.
I love it, oops, I said that already. This is almost like perfect, I feel I can relate to it in many ways.
I love the opening verse, it drew me in alot, however the last verse was very powerful. And is a great way to end it, It was a beautiful write.
Good luck for the contest you entered.
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yeah, this is beautiful. If you were to leave this as the only proof of your existance I think you'd get a lot of people liking you. I do not think I would be able to come up with anything as poetically beautiful to be remembered by as you have here.
really, really beautiful.
luvvs
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Wow, thank you for tour very kind comment! You are really too kind, thanks again! I will be sure to return the favour.
write on...
ss
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this is the first realistic one i've seen so far, one that could actually be on someone's grave. great job!
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Thank you so much for the awesome comment, it is truly encouraging. I will be sure to return the favour.
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