I rail against the edges,
the fringes of society
that choose to ignore
every warning of a world
gone mad-
The answers sought are not
for the weak of heart, or those
riding the proverbial fence;
their splinters leave
me bleeding-
I choose only to wait
in an active state, standing
firm in love; proactively strong,
my band aid seeks salvation
for all-
(c) Debby Sorensen Carlson
3/28/2007
A contest entry
- Give me your very best! by Carly Pop.
450 points, ended April 3, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Society will never realize I fear. Its a wonderful poem that society needs to take in. Brava
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Dreamer
Thank you so much and God bless. Debby
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love it. but we are now the ones on the fringe of society now. a world slowly turning upside down.
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Rusty
You have a point.. and thankyou so much for reading and commenting. Blessings. Debby
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Interesting piece to be certain, nice flow to it and a strong message. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e
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Lady
Thank you for your lovely comments. Blessings. Debby
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this poem..it was amazing...went together so well... well done!
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Cherry
Thank you so much ! Blessings. debby
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< Elegant
Gosh- thank you so much !!!! Blessings. Debby -
This is truely amazing. I love the power in it all and how the message is to all.
I rail against the edges,
the fringes of society
that choose to ignore
every warning of a world
gone mad-
So true....its just when will we realize.
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Elleon
You are right.. when we realize and that is when we know.
Thank you for your comments. I appreciate them very much. Blessings. Debby
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Bravo!
This is a very powerful piece. "I choose only to wait in an active state, standing firm in love;" brilliantly stated. -
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Heavens Child
Thank you so very much. Blessings. Debby
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< Audie
Thankyou so much ! Blessings. Debby -
wow
This poem has amazing power.I love it. :]
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Thank you !!
I appreciate you !! God bless. Debby
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This says much about the lack of caring in society and how one can 'stand firm in love' in that 'active state' hoping that your strentgh will use this 'band aid' for all, well written with amazing imagery, it has the power of the strength of even one who chooses to do something about this 'world gone mad', thank you and all the best. Powerfully felt and well done!
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Acqua
Thank you very much for your perceptive comments .. They are much appreciated. Blessings. Debby
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Oh this is clever! I love the metaphoric title!
"The answers sought are not
for the weak of heart, or those
riding the proverbial fence;
their splinters leave
me bleeding-"
Such a powerful write....very emotioanl!
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Soulfullheart
Thank you so much. I appreciate you reading and commenting. Means alot. Blessings. Debby
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wow really great poem with strng emotions...nice write
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Tears..
Thank you very much !! Blessings. Debby
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I love this poem…. I love it. And I LOVE your choice of words. You really touch a part of the soul. I can tell that from what everyone has written you from this poem. You are truly a great poet. Keep up the great work. I love the second stanza. I must say I like this poem so much that I reread it over three times. It is beautiful. I am going to tell my friend to read this one…I think she’ll like it.
Well I hope you the best…and I will try to read more of your work when I get time. (I am at school right now. Sorry.)
Love
Amanda
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Amanda..
How very sweet of you and thankyou. Also , thank you for recommending my work. God bless. Debby
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what a fabulous write! you have really put your heart into this! i love this verse:I choose only to wait
in an active state, standing firm in love; proactively strong, my band aid seeks salvation for all-
what a bandaid He is too! thank you so much for sharing this. keep writing and letting your light shine! God bless you always
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Debilynn
Thank you so much Debilynn.. Here to the forever Son - shine. Blessings. Debby
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Thank you so much for reading my work and I am so glad you enjoyed this. Blessings. Debby -
WOW
This is truly a fine piece of poetry.
This is what we are called to do - "to wait in an active state, standing firm in love." Through Him, we can do this. We can be in this mad world but not become a part of it.
I pray that all who read this piece will seek the answer and cure for all their pain and maddness. There is only one Answer.
Well done dear friend.
Love and hugs
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Jo
Amen Jo.. Amen !! There is only one answer. Much love and mucho hugs. I love you. d
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Debby, I'm glad you commented on my poem. It gave me the opportunity to read your poetry. I have always wanted my pieces to scream "LOOK TO THE FATHER!" as yours do, yet, most often, I find that gets obscured by the more base emotions and thoughts. When I read your poetry, it makes me realize that mine is lacking this essential element. When I read this, I immediately thought of I Cor. 15:57-58 and about Christ, the bleeding band-aid. As I read this, I am planning my next junket into "Debby's world"--I can't wait to read the next piece. ..::WW::..
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Hi Debby,
I really enjoyed the line, "... riding the proverbial fence; their splinters leave me bleeding"
I like that their indecision, their splinters are felt by you. All around, it's beautifully written. Sorry, I'm new and not sure how to do the stars/applause. -
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Pencils
Thankyou. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece.. and your comments are right on.. To add applause, you just click on the yellow happy clicks below the comment box. When someone sends you a comment and you want to rate the comment.. all you have to do is place your mouse over the stars.. from 1 to 5 and click.. it will automatically do it for you. I hope this helps and welcome to the site. Blessings. Debby
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Thanks Debby, I'm sure I'll get the hang of it Thanks for the welcome too!
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SPIRITUALLY INSPIRING
Yes I do agree with the power of the band-aid for it has helped me so much. It showed me that it's always there to do all it can. Thank you for sharing this with me and congrats on your challenge...
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darryl
Thank you Darryl.. God bless. Debby
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powerful!
what a powerful, powerful write, alot of talent I can see! thanks for entering -
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Carly
Thank you Carly.. and thanks for the contest. Blessings. Debby
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To open the eyes of the blind -- Is to bring in artificial light, Yet those who believe and see the real danger in our world today -- Know honestly that we are facing human exstinction... very powerful and an amazingly brilliantly penned write...
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Robert
Thank you Robert.. very much ! Blessings. Debby
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People don't always heed warniung so we need banaids to fix the things we screw up. Society has many problems that can't be fixed with one large band aid.
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Lady Altheia
No, people do not always heed the warnings nor reach for the band-aid. Thanks for you comment and reading. It is appreciated. d
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Keep it up Deb, we all need the band aids, we can give a little comfort to anyone who needs us and if we protect the children then we have a future so keep the band aids handy
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C
Thank ya .. and I agree. Blessings. Debby
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Excellent Use of Metaphors
As usual, my darling Sis, you have written yet another masterpiece for our awesome Father and His Son, our Lord and Saviour. I hope readers get the point. Not only are your choice of metaphors really good, but the phrasing here is nothing short of excellent. Again, a read I have thoroughly enjoy and which I have come to expect from your limitless talent our Lord has given you. Now is the time, dear one, to consider compiling about 100 of your best and submit them to valid publishers.
Much love and hugs, SisB♥n 
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Bonnie
Thank you so much Bonnie.. I am sort of compiling . Maybe now is the time to get serious. Hugs and mucho love. d
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good
almost mystic, double images of thoughts, "band aid" could be stand in for "God"! -
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John
Hi John- it is God I am talking about when I say.. band aid. Thanks for commenting. I sure appreciate it. Blessings. Debby
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i understand where your coming from "Band-Aid's" have always sorta been the fix for things gone wrong...juz "cover it up and pretend it's not there"
nice write
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Thank you very much ! Blessings..d
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My favorite is the middle stanza.
The metaphor of the fence and splinters is quite effective. I think you need to relate the bandaid imagery more to the other metaphor. A bandaid doesn't really offer salvation, it offers more a salve or small comfort, sort of like a lollipop. -
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Thank You
Thank you.. I saw the band aid as a fix thus salvation.. but I do see what you mean too and I will put some thought into it. I appreciate your honesty and comments. Blessings. Debby
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A excellent pice for sure. I love the metaphors you used and the background is so cute. great work.
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Actually, when I saw this.. I saw hearts.. and now- I see deranged marshmellows.. so I think I need to change it.. ( though it is cute...lol ) Thanks for your comments and reading me. It means alot. Debby
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