Reminiscent of years gone by
she sits
staring out at the landscape.
Heead rested
where his head once laid.
Hands on arm rests
where strong hands once toyed
with frayed upholstery edges.
Lately,
loneliness had become her lover.
Longing for passion's touch,
desiring beautiful bliss,
yearning to feel the love
deep within
she still felt for him.
These feelings ushered in
guilt.
Rose from the chair
to busy herself,
running from remorse and fear.
Hurried hands begin to clean out
old desk.
Memories of the day
they purchased it together
at an antique fair flood her.
Cleaning the drawer,
she suddenly finds a hidden drawer
inside another drawer.
Opening it,
she finds an envelope
reading:
My Dearest Maggie
Fragile hands began to shake.
Opening the envelope, she pulled out
a piece of paper.
Immediately putting it to her nose,
tears flooded her eyes for she could smell
his cologne on it still.
She began to read:
Sweet Mags,
I miss you so very much.
Life has been so lonely for you,
this i know, and
i want you to love again.
Nothing will ever replace
the love we share.
Not shared,
share.
For our love is a love eternal.
It will never die,
and God will send you a man
who will honor the love we have
for each other.
Open your heart to love again Mags.
Do it for me.
Eternally yours,
Charles
Bewildered,
she looked to the top of the paper
she held in her hands,
and saw today's date
and smiled through bittersweet tears,
for her Charles had sent her permission
to love again.
In a list
A contest entry
- write a letter by Honeydew.
375 points, ended April 1, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything. Just Impress Me. by I-Am-Custard.
900 points, ended April 13, 2007, 58 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Round Contest!! Anything goes this first round. by FightOffYourDemons.
300 points, ended April 7, 2007, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Beautiful write, congrats, on the silver..It's deserving..~Pastel
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This is such a nice concept for a poem. It is so sweet. And the way you write it made me really fall into it. Like I really wanted to read it more after each line I read and you never disappointed. So very cute
Thanks
Nikki
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A good edit, thanks for telling me, this is much more coherant now and my empathy for the woman hasn't been damaged by trying to make sense of the short lines, which is what I wanted from you. Thanks again, this has a good chance now.
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This is nice, the story is sweet and the words made me actually feel for this woman. Your line breaks though were too frequent, time passes slowly for this woman, it's relentless to her in the wake of her absent lover, so make the structure reflect that. It could also do with a bit of punctuation to add form, especially with the letter.
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This is great, I could feel the emotion. The contest was to write a letter… wow! What a letter! This is better than any plain old letter I ever read. Well done.
Love,
Amera
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!Its like you were saying it to me as i was reading it. I really enjoyed the way the truth and emotions were put!!! very nice !!!
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Beautiful!!
Ahh this brings me to one of my favorite movies ... The lake House ... so much dispair, love and mystery then love again!! so wonderfully penned my friend this is a keeper!!
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Ahh, daughter, I adore this! I have heard a similar story, but not near so well penned as this is, it is wonderful! I am glad to see the wondeful hope and love brimming form you again in this lovely piece! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e * 
Love ya! Mama
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i am so going to cry now. i can not critique this as it is something that is so precious to my heart you can not possibly know. thank you for sharing this with me. viyanna rosemarie
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the story has a tone to it off old dusty years
as she remaindersthe antiue fear
and the drawer of memories nice metaphor i believed i used that once
anyways the whole stting of her room
as memories seems to be found inher antique furniture
just that furniture seems tolight the imagery
the funiture captivtes those love memories
of just everything
she finds a paper
I just love the unique and the flow of words
howwhen i read it i can almost hear you as the author speaking as one listens
this story is very creative because it's message sends of a metaphor of a furniture captivating once love
very nice
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This is a wonderful piece; so tender and loving .. sad but hopeful and beautiful. You told such a lovely story . I'm smiling here.. Good luck in the contest. This is a winner to me. Blessings. Debby
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this is a very beautiful poem. it really is touching and sad it is really good you should be proud of it!! a little teary right now...
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very touching write
one can only imagine and or wanting to find such a note from her lost love giving permission to move on the way you have written in your write..thank you for entering my contest..hugs Honetdew
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This is so sad... yet oh so beautiful! It definately... wow... took my breath away... not sure what else to say! Great write! Rock on! xoxo MEg
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wonderful.
this is an amazing poem. i love it.
makes me sad..but still it is great.
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this is great
wow i love this poem so much. It made me cry. Wich is hard for me. I enjoyed it so much. Good luck in the contest.
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Awwww...this was so sweet! I nearly shed a tear while reading it. Wonderful, wonderful job. Good luck to you in the contest!
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very sweet. good job with writing this. enjoyed. good luck in the contest. really like that photo too.
blu
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This is so beautiful sis, had a tear in my eye while reading it, wouldn't it be grand if things worked out just like this.
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This is so romantic and beautiful, can't help but imagine it true for someone, somewhere.... I love the imagery and the sentiment here
Karen
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