I'm stuck,
day.after.day.after.nightfall
seeing waterworks, no, fireworks
from the sides of vision
going on and on and ...on...
pinpricks of light which capture me such as a sunburst would
..it's you.
I'm falling from grace, to
a smile I can't see, floating away to a place
where [maybe?] you live now.
I'll imagine myself:
breathing and surviving
within arms so nonexistant they vanish.
& I miss you so very much.
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It's been such a short amount of time since my grandpa died, and yet I feel like so much has happened. I miss him. A lot. =[
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Losing someone close to you robs something out of the human spirit. It's not how it was meant to be. I appreciate how you allowed me to get inside your head, and visualize how your misery is causing you to have these "firework" images. They seem to be cravings that cause to you have splotch images of your grandpa about to embrace you, but it can never happen. He's gone for good in a place you have no idea how to reach. The only line that I felt was awkward: "within arms so nonexistant they vanish". In my opinion, I would take away "so" and rewrite the line. Nice work as always. You'll push through.
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Aww Jess, I know how it feels. And i know it hurts, Wish i could tell you it would stop, But it never really does. But the good news is, even when you feel down. You still have a world of people around you, ready to bring you back up. You're always going to miss him, But think of it this way, Would be really want you sad because he's gone, Or happy because he was there. ^^;.
That works sometimes for me, so i hope it does for you also.
*hugs*
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"I'm falling from grace, to
a smile I can't see, floating away to a place
where [maybe?] you live now."
Absolutely beautiful but such a devastating feeling.
I hope you start to feel a little better about the situation than you do now.
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wow, this blew me away with the depth of emotion and longing for that special soul to be in your life again. amazing write.
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