Rush through the trees
Up side the mountain
Over the sea
Into my eyes
Though the wind
sings a gentle song
It can be as violent
As the sun's warmth
Dance around me
Like sprites at night
Free to roam the world
And cool the summer days
Crash over shore side hills
Break limbs from the apple trees
Part the skys
And sway the rain
Wind blows through me
And lifts me to the skys
sooths me
And freezes my skin
~Kailtin~
A contest entry
- Elements -- Round 2 by Ryno.
300 points, ended April 7, 2007, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow .. this is just .. wow .. probably one of your best poems ever. I think it would be best formatted if put to the left side (left-aligned) just because of its style, fashion trend, whatever. But thank-you for entering this stunning poem. Best wishes in the contest!
~Ryan~ -
Wow, excellent work. Congrats on getting through the first round of Ryans contest. I think you deserve to go to the next round judging by this awesome poem. You know what? I really see nothing wrong whatsoever here. Everything just clicks. Great flow and amazing work. The imagery just 'blows' me away! LOL, hahaha, okay, it was lame...
♣Kevan♣
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