Glowing
Embers
Reflected in your eye
Heat
Rising
Lips
Embracing
Fire Growing High
Tongues
Dancing
Clothes
Falling
Phoenix takes to flight
Skin
Melting
Souls
Blazing
Inferno's Greatest Height
Please tell me what you think
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ooh baby! hot hot hot!
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you see, i'm not a fan of funky lines, it's just, well too hard to read actually... the flow seems to be taken away.. nonetheless, the words are pure and strong.. great write and thanks for entering..
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Great use of words and combinations. You build the passion expertly with great rhythm, like a heart beating faster. Well done. BTW, thanks for the comment.
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I like your euphemisms in this poem. Good work. I like your style. “clothes falling” How did they?
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wow. this was. wow. just amazing, i love choppy styles of poetry. i love the beat it makes when you read it aloud. just freaking amazing.
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Amazing. I love how strong these few words come across.. VERY good word choice. I like the structure of this poem and the line spacing and everything.. it's great. I also love the comparison of this passionate love scene to fire and how it remains throughout the whole poem. Great job.
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irresistable!
unfolding before my eyes, drawing me into the experience..This is effective writing! I'm a fan--
Outstanding work
~Pastel
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It invoked a slow passionate scene of hot sensuous love in my mind. So few words, precise yet simple, are able to say so much, and then it says far more because the majority of the scene is created in the readers mind. The flow was good and I enjoyed reading it.
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hot
I love the flow and roll of this. It reflects just like the unfolding of the moment...fleeting..potent and sweet intensity.
S
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Superb
This is truly a hard thing to do, namly because of the difficulty of writing a good poem in less than 30 words. Everything feels so right about this poem, espically when you know whos its for, even subconsiosly. I can;t wait for this contest!
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