As I sit here alone, I find that my
thoughts are filled with you.
The love that once filled my every
waking moment.
I find, that no matter what I
try to do to forget-I can't.
In each other we had found
something so deep, so real, so wonderful.
Darling, I know you would not want
me to cry all the time, But darling,
my heart is broken, shattered into thousands
of pieces. All I find is a jigsaw puzzle
that I can't seem to figure out how to
start putting together again.
I find that I am "Hopelessly Devoted" to
you and your memory. I became your
widow before I ever became your wife.
I don't know why God chose to
take you home with him,
I find it rather cruel,
He gave you to me, then
took you away just as quickly.
Darling, I will try to walk with
my head held high,
But know this-when I finally
join you in Heaven, the tears
that will be falling, will be tears
of happiness for then, we will
finally be reunited, and it will feel
so good.
Till then my darling,
With all my love,
The one you left behind
Author notes
6)Losing a loved one.
In a list
A contest entry
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Comments
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Nicely written though to be honest I found the continued use of the word darling as distracting. Other than that one little thing I have to say I did like the write. Especially that part about becoming a widow before you had become a wife... excellent. Great job. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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Thanks for the entry, Good Luck!
~Carlie -
Good job, thanks for entering.
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Darling, I know you would not want
me to cry all the time, But darling,
my heart is broken, shattered into thousands
of pieces. All I find is a jigsaw puzzle
that I can't seem to figure out how to
start putting together again.
Darling, I will try to walk with
my head held high,
But know this-when I finally
join you in Heaven, the tears
that will be falling, will be tears
of happiness for then, we will
finally be reunited, and it will feel
so good.
These words were so sad and touching, beautifully written. Good job and Good luck in the contest
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This is heart-wrenching. I loved reading this, it's just so full of powerful emotions.
This is my favorite part:
"I find, that no matter what I
try to do to forget-I can't."
I understand the feeling of trying to forget someone. I can't forget, I know I shouldn't even bother trying to, but sometimes it feels like it would be easier to not think about them.
Thank you so much for entering the contest.
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wow deff a tear jerker - what can i say that hasnt been said b4 - know he loves you with a rhythm with every beat of your heart well done and many blessings always xxx love ya Sis
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this was so cool and touching. i loved it!
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Thank you for your heartfelt entry, Josie
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i like this. i like the line "I became your
widow before I ever became your wife." well done. good luck in the contest.
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Aww this was so deeply heartfelt and your words were so beautiful. A truly breath-taking write
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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Wow this one surely tugs at my heart strings. A very emotional poem but expressed with beauty. Truly a wonderful write.
Best of luck & thanks for entering
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i loved this.
it was wonderful.
i'm so sorry if this happened to you. =(
the emotion was wonderful, and thanks so much for entering my contest. =) -
Great write. I like how you let the emotion just flow through you and into your writing. Good luck
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This is so full of emotion, you have left me nearly speechless, thank you for this, I really loved the line about being a widow before you were his wife, this is so bittersweet and beautiful.
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I like loved this!
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I still love this poem, it's beautiful, yet so sad.
Though please, do put your option in hte authors notes next time, or I'll have to DQ
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wow...very moving...
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hey sorry for the confusion but can you please enter this contest instead
http://allpoetry.com/contest/show/2403891
i am deleting this one
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this is truly and amazing write..my favorite lines were these,
"Darling, I will try to walk with
my head held high,
But know this-when I finally
join you in Heaven, the tears
that will be falling, will be tears
of happiness for then, we will
finally be reunited, and it will feel
so good."
I liked how you ended it, it made me think of that song..in situations like this all you can do is hope, thank you for entering and good luck -
wow....this was beautiful, heartbreaking, and tragic.I loved it...good job.
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wow true heartbreak my sister...we have spoke on this many times but it is still as sad now.
I am sorry for your loss and I am glad for your spirit and freindship.
Luv Ya Sis
Simon
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heartbreaking
A truly touching poem. All our tears will be wiped away one day, but down here it can hurt so badly...
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Firstly, let me say apologies for the late judgement of this contest, This is a very very very sensitive piece and it's evident right from the outset, cleverly written, and passion filled, all the qualities of a personal piece. Thanks for the entry, and i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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FANTASTIC
wow wow wow! this was absolutely a great write. its very sad and moving. i really enjoyed reading it. great job! -
The one you left behind.....fantastic use of words. Best of luck in the contest.
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with all my love,
the one yu left behind.........
remarkable ending to a lovely poem i must say......
full of your heartbreak and your pain and with your love spalshed all over........ wonderfully written..........
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thank you so much for entering this beautiful poem into my contest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Thank you again
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This really touches me. I don't know what I'd do if this were to happen to me. I'm so very sorry for your loss.
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Yes my friend, a tear jerker! This line really spoke to me...
I became your
widow before I ever became your wife
powerful and so sad
and your ending,simple but powerful words in loss
the one you left behind
beautifully written in sorrow
love and
Michelle
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So sad...
This broke my heart! Your story is so sad and I'm so sorry! Well done and good luck in my conest. Jane -
So sad...
This broke my heart! Your story is so sad and I'm so sorry! Well done and good luck in my conest. Jane -
very amazing
good luck in my contest, best wishes!
xo
kandy -
this right here...this is nice! i really liked this one....uh oh! is that a tear running down my cheek..beautiful!!!!
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wonderful
again a marveloous write on love and loss
showing the eternal bond and devotion to the one you lost.
you have great displays of such a perfect love and relationship
so marvelous and full of hope.
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This was bittersweet, and there is no other pain quite like when two doves are separated.
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This reminds me of something of how my mother must feel after my father passed away. I love this, it was very tender and sweet. Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
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this was extremely sweet! very nicely written. good luck! -Captain Obvious
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Awww, again, I am sorry you had to go through this. This is very deep and moving. I hope you continue to fight through life, even though it is hard. This is an amazing write, well done. ~~
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Heartfelt
A true picture of sorrow amidst the desired happiness of memories writ upon the slab of love with the sheer tapestry of personal emotions coming from the innermost core of the heart and then this poem is like a sequel to the streams of emotion or vice versa..Shubs
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Thanks Shubs, for the great comment on My Darling. There is a lot to this one. I am glad you stopped by and enjoyed the read.
Nyetta
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Wow-
Powerful piece You have written my Friend
Beautiful words from the Heart-Spirit
Loss is great~can be felt~
A Gem placed in Sacred hands now...
but we can still feel the Light shine
from the Sparkle-Radiance...
All I can hear is I'M SORRY~
He is physically not here but his Memory and energy felt~walks amongst us...
Many blessings to You!
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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This is beautiful indeed. I think there is a message here that many will be able to relate to, for loss comes in many forms...sometimes by death, sometimes by choice or circumstance. Beautiful penning, and I thank you for suggesting I read it.
Best wishes,
~J.
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A VERY EMOTIONAL PIECE - TO SAY THE LEAST!
Darling, I will try to walk with
my head held high,
But know this-when I finally
join you in Heaven, the tears
that will be falling, will be tears
of happiness for then, we will
finally be reunited, and it will feel
so good.
Eloquently and Soulfully spoken, indeed! This sums up what many people feel when the man or woman they love and whom they had hoped, planned, and dreamed of spending the rest of their life with is called to their little cottage in Heaven way too soon! The tears of sorrow now will definately become tears of joy when true lovers such as this are reunited in the sky - in a little garden in Heaven.
Peace & Love!
Earl.
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Lovely My Dear Niece ~
Some things are hard to speak of
when losing the ones we love......
but you spoke loud & clear in this write,
and I'm sure Timmy heard you all the way to the heavens above ~
Thank you for the memories ~
Uncle Bear ~
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This was sad...very sweet..i like the line "I became your widow before I ever became your wife." it really shows how you felt about this man and loosing him...i know so many people who lost there husbands (mostly military wives cause my dad is ARMY) and i can just see there pain.....i love it!
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Fantastic!!!!!
Wow Babe, this is definately a tear jerker! Definately need a box of tissues with this one! You have really done a great job with this one! I see that government official driving up this girl's house and handing her the telegram of her love's passing. This piece should capture the heart of everybody on AP, I know it did mine. Thanks for sharing this fantastic write. Keep that pen of yours forever flowing.
Love ya
Jim *hug
P.S. why isn't this in a contest?
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Wow mom, this is indeed a great addition to my collection I am working on. great job.
Justin -
Sis, you took my breath away with this one... It is soooo beautiful...
These are my favorite parts,
'I find that I am "Hopelessly Devoted" to
you and your memory. I became your
widow before I ever became your wife.'
&
'With all my love,
The one you left behind'
It is so sad but beautiful...
love always
and 's
Your Sis
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so sad
beautifully written, Sunshine.....
The story which inspired you must have been a very touching one....You have penned greif and saddess so beautifiully in this great piece...
Lynda
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Excellent!!
This is just so heartfelt and touched my heart so! Beautiful job sweetie! I could not be more proud of you!! Your words touched my soul.
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