While the girls dressed in indigo gowns danced around me,
Her delicate, creamy elbow rubbed against mine.
My spine shivered at the subtlety of her come on,
And I stared at her hungrily until the next dance.
The woman in white, my tempest, my queen,
Who clearly had the softest lips in all the land,
And the pinkest, and plumpest, and roundest, and:
I must express that I am earnest in my intentions.
It’d be a complete miracle if she’d even speak to me,
She being someone with such ethereal beauty and grace.
I could smell the jasmine on her skin as I approached her,
I had never seen such an angel in muslin, not in my whole life.
I start sweating, enthusiasm building, fear rising,
I could not even fathom her saying yes to me.
In my near future I could see one lonely little kiss,
The idea was making me rupture, burst at the seams.
I was going to ask her to the borscht belt, Catskill Mountains,
I spoke with excitement: “Boooosht bee-yelt, keetskeel mounteens.”
Just then the confident legion behind me disappeared.
“It is the proper season,” she responded with a smile.
Author notes
I have never really tried midline rhyming, and thought I would attempt it for this one. [I don't normally like end line rhyming poems, which is why I opted for this choice.]
A contest entry
- Mission: Difficult IV by shewalksintomine.
1200 points, ended March 29, 2007, 9 entries
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Interesting one here. Almost like something from Cinderella meets She's all that or something. LOL. So cute.
Wonderful vocab too my dear. Amazing.
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Hahaha, the vocab was the contest assignment. Well, half of the "interesting" words were at least.
Thank you!
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I am terribly sorry for the generic comment. I have no good excuse, but it is a bit of a switch going from first to third shift. Please know that I did judge fairly and the winners of the contest will be who pixxie and I thought should win and not just on a roll of the dice.
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Well done this was a lovely story. Well said and good luck.
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