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Evil Icicles (Chain Haiku)



The winter and ice
can be harsh and never nice
sharp enough to slice.

It sits on the sill
over the house on the hill
waiting for its kill.

Always be aware
leaving your house if you dare
for ice in the air.

So run really fast
when its falling from the mast
and don't be caught last.

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  • Yemassee gold member
    November 8, 2008
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    I love the rhyming, you did a really good job! I especially liked, "So run really fast when its falling from the mast" That was really good!


  • Yemassee gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    I love the rhyming, you did a really good job! I especially liked, "So run really fast when its falling from the mast" Thst was really good!


  • risewiththesmoke
    March 28, 2007

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    ooh, nice job!!! it's really cool how you made the rhyming thing work. very original topic as well... lol. nice job, thanks for entering!!


  • sweetpearl
    March 28, 2007

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    I like this piece. It could probably be stronger if it weren't constricted to being in haiku form but as it is, it's really nice. Damn the ice! The chill scares me, I really don't like the cold. The rhyme's slick, it slides off well.