Aging ashen hands slide through the golden sleeves of the sorcerer's robe
trembling, he reaches for that cherished icon of his office
a disk embedded with his wizard's guild of vivid and colorful designs
that they called upon their greatest artists skill to craft,
having empowered its hues through hours of meditation
with all the potency of sagacious light they possessed,
till it nearly radiated with their ethereally anointed essence,
stirring a panorama of worlds and realms, vivid to the core.
The sky outside his chamber window has turned sapphire
just as he had been warned in his foreboding dream,
soon the watery apocalypse would destroy all the life he had known.
He takes the precious enchanted medallion
sitting down in his golden chair and places it carefully on his lap,
looking over at the row of his lifeless brethren
in their golden hooded robes, sitting with their heads slumped forward,
silver chalices they dropped on the floor
spilling the poison left after they ended their lives.
As the floor shakes from the violent earthquake
the last guardian of this sacred instrument of perfect wisdom,
watches the wall of sea race to swallow his mystical metropolis.
Hearing the screams of the fleeing cursed,
while the wave covers their alabaster pyramids and castles,
his weary eyes await their destined fate.
Lifting up the medallion to the air, eyes focus one last surge,
it vanishes by his desperate spell,
an old man's smiling in relief as the rushing doom drowns his soul.
Somewhere in another realm this symbol of omniscience
hovers obediently between time and eternity,
occasionally seeping its power into sleeping souls
taking them on journeys where visions include men in golden robes.
Author notes
I hope this fits for the contest. It was just how the photo inspired me.
Name: penman
A contest entry
- Rhythmic Visionary Attempts by Hermit Risin.
340 points, ended April 9, 2007, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Imagination by burdened.
600 points, ended April 30, 2007, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A great piece, powerful and full of vivid images. I was captivated and could almost see what was actually happening. It was intriguing the storyline, and i had to reread it a few times, before I actually absorbed all of it. Thanks for sharing.
A few suggestions, or maybe misconceptions on my part:
In line 11: "just as he been warned in his foreboding dream,", I feel that it would make more sense to the reader to have a word in between 'he' and 'been', for example 'has'.
Also, in line 24: "his wearing eyes await their destined fate." Should wearing, be wearying?
Ok, enough criticism, I like it. (please could you put your penname in the authors comments, or i cannot considere you for a high position) Thanks take care XxX
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Thank you for your wonderful comment and letting me know about the two places that needed correction. My eyes aren't what they should be. I also put my name in the author's notes.
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well done..congrats!!
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Thank you so much for the congrats.
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wow! i really dont know what to say. I think Desire said it all! Just amazing imagery...keep up the work!
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Thank you. A bit different for me.
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very well done. astounding imagery, if a little forboding. then again, that it is ominous is why i liked it.
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Thank you so much for the great comment. I really appreciate it.
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Magnificent!
What a vision You have penned from the photo~
You have such a Creative noggin'~
I need to rent for a few days
Love this tale You have weaved for I did not want it to stop~
Powerful images that took me there and felt as if I journeyed alongside You~Bravo!!!
Keep that ink flowing~~
and Your vision going~~~
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As the floor shakes from the violent earthquake
the last guardian of this sacred instrument of perfect wisdom,
watches the wall of sea race to swallow his mystical metropolis.
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Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and my Love
~ Desire~*~
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Awww, that you darling. As usual you know how to tickle me with your beautiful feather of love. You are so precious.
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