The whirlwind of lies
The tornado of deceit
I can’t take this any more
This tangled web of your trickery.
You say things, anticipating me to believe
When you know that it isn’t true
I don’t know how you can pull this off
This twisted web of treachery
The stealth, the surreptitiousness
The ache and anguish that you’ve caused me
My life, what is held in your hands
The decision is up to you
Do you want me to live?
Just one more shove and I won’t
Its just that simple
Just the effortless abrasion that you’ve caused
Has turned into grave ailment
This cruel web of falsehood
You consider it’s all amusing and games
I predict you’re pleased
An uncomplicated girl with an ordinary heart
It never mattered
And it never will.
A contest entry
- heartbroken by the one you love by Purple-Meow.
525 points, ended October 23, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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very nice write love it
GOOD LUCK -
Wow! This is your best piece I read yet! You gave everything a free-verse poem needed! I very much enjoyed your imagery in this one! I would actually advise you add a bit more to this because this is very emotionally effective. I love that and I'm not joking. This is very good! Just try breaking up into stanzas again for effect. Very great write!
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Well I have more to say than "wow" as shadow of my angel put it. I think that this is an amazing peice, and i so know how you feel. Awesome job and don't ever stop writing. Love you!
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wow thats amazing
a lot of emotion
you used some big words too
wow....thats wow and im siting right next to you while i'm posting this
all i got to say is wow
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