They grew up in small towns,
with their Hollywood dreams
of heroin and cocaine.
Big parties were their scene,
always looking for a way out.
Jumpin trains, buses
feet to the pavement,
headed for the star lights
of porcelain dolls and anorexic models,
longing for the glitter beyond suburbia.
Children of the street,
cheap sex, speed balls and unwanted babies.
Once beautiful, now sad tragedies of reality,
another hollow shell of what once was
found broken and dirty in an alley.
~meet Jane Doe #19.
Author notes
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mysticstorm
A contest entry
- Beautiful minds....please enter. by islekine.
760 points, ended January 11, 27 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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It's sad, but sadly, lives are taken tragically by our own foolish mistakes. Beautiful write, I loved it. Thank you so much for entering.
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Awesome!!! I love this, but i have to dq it as i don't think its dirty pretty. Nice write though
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I like the picture a very sad story written so well this is a wonderful peace I agree with My1lovewearsdiapers that the color dos make it hard to read, but no big deal i can read it lol woderfully written peace
~GOOD LUCK~
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This is a fantastic piece. A sad story told so well. How ever the color of the text makes it a bit hard to read
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This is such a tragedy . . . which is why my goal, and my mission, is to bring young people back to Christ . . . because this happens all too much.
This struck a personal chord with me. The stellar imagery and the pure emotion.
I'm at a loss for words. Bravissimo.
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Some real imagery here!
Well penned!
Thanks for entering!
Best wishes in the contest!
Write on!
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this goes brilliantly with the picture you've used, i especially love the imagery you've used, and then the ending, just finishes it off perfectly.
thanks for entering
♥
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of porcelain dolls and anorexic models,
longing for the glitter beyond suburbia.
Fave lines right tehre....
I liked this one..It leaked true emotion,
The idea of beautyu from the outside- only from the insdie to have faded.
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Wow!!! Really fits the whole concept of this contest!! I love it!!
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this was awesomeley detailed. and i loved reading this. to me it was pretty good..
thankies for entering
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Fantastic! Very nicely written, It was quite an amazing write. =] I enjoyed reading it. Congrats on all your trophies. Thank you for the entry.
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wonderfulll!!!! its somewhat what i was looking for.
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wow!this poem is really good: Very nice, hollywood as it is good luck with the contest x
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Nice Job truely beautiful
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Dark and pretty
I know when I get an empty feeling in my stomache that something has affected me. You got through.
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very nice!!! Thank you for being one of the bold people who entered something despite no instruction
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Nice
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Wow!
I'm not sure what else to say!
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OH WOW!!! This was just......I am speechless.... I just watched a movie on the Wonderland murders and this was just as profound a piece on that way of life as the movie was!!! WOW.....WOW......WOW!!!
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very nice write, and i love the picture, the poem itself was really sad, and very true.
nice job
thanks for your entry and good luck
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describes more like las vegas i think lol, but hollywood works too, i bet the poem goes beyond that, and i kinda understand but its good all the same, thanx for entering
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nothing to say only that it was amazing in every way i can thnk of, you are so a finalist i loved it great poem sweetie..xxxx
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Great
This is brilliant it's so true and real, that's what I like about it. You don't glamourise Hollywood like mose you speak truth and that's what I like about this, great write, keep it up, Romanee, xx
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I really enjoyed this. I loved the dark dirty side of glamour revealed through your truthful words. The gruesome details and beautifully imperfect imagery. I was glad you chose not to add the punctuation since this is a more serious topc which should not be typed LiKe [t.h.i.s.]. You did very well and thanks for the entry.
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oo i love how this is dark and filled with imagery and good ideas thanx for entering and good luck doll♥
Dead Star--x
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This is wonderful, I love it! Great write.
[good.job&thanks.for.entering]
x.
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Simply amazing. I adore satire; this also seems to be dirty pretty-esque, yes? Thanks so much for entering & good luck
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This is a great wirte, sad and powerful. It tells a great story. Thanks for entering and Good Luck in the Contest <3
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wow. i really like this. great job! FINALISTSS! good luck darling.
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a very emotional and sad poem, it is original and unique, the length is perfect, quick and too the point, i loved it, thank you for entering the contest and good luck
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this is amazing...aboslutly amazing...i checked it out cause you said i may like it and i do! it's so sad that this is what our world is coming too...it's horrible. awesome write and thankyou so much for first off all your extreamly nice comments and for sending me the link to this poem! i love it!!!!
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I really like this depiction of the Hollywood scene. That description basically tells it all, and you got it right on. By the way, that picture creeped me out, but it fit with the idea of cocaine and heroin. Nice poem and good luck to you.
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this was a really great poem..i enjoyed reading this and can really relate to this write..your word were powerful, strong and emotionl as well keep writting your very talented
~Chrissy~ -
Powerful
The absolute truth about how this generation thinks they know it all but yet killing them~selves as the older Generation.
Good Luke with your contest
Blessings
~Cheryl~
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there is so much honesty in this write. i love the line:
of porcelain dolls and anorexic models,
longing for the glitter beyond suburbia.
it just stands out in my head.
this is really great. and the last line . sticks.
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coley
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Perfect view of the dirty pretty scene. Brava. You can feel the relation and it makes all dirty pretty make sence. Thanks for entering and good luck.
NoL -
beautiful. i loved this. great job. good luck in the contest. thanx for entering.
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very beautifully expressed, i love the imagery, the vivid sadness it paints. great picture as well.
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this is a very powerful piece, great use of the dirrty pretty form. i love the lines:
of porcelain dolls and anorexic models,
longing for the glitter beyond suburbia.
this is such a powerful piece, with a great message. you are clearly a master of this style, so many people try to use it, but it is pieces like this that shine out with originality.
i wish you all the best in the contest
forever
lucy
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I love the pic you have to go along with this, very well written. Thank you for entering the contest. whisper
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Hi, a very good dirty pretty, I have never tried this form must give it a whirl,lol, maybe my worm collection could be classed as dirty pretty, loved it all the best in the comp, hugs Di
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Mystic, You have outdone yourself with this one... I have read this many times, but never commented. My hat goes off to you, BRAVO!!!
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Great Job
Jumpin trains, buses
feet to the pavement,
headed for the star lights
of porcelain dolls and anorexic models,
longing for the glitter beyond suburbia.
BEAUTIFUL IMAGERY! This poem made me feel very exilerated. I liked how you described the places (for example,the big parties and how they got there) as much as the feelings. The title is perfection in my opinion, because it relates to glamour. I liked this a lot. The only thing I can offer as a suggestion is to possibly change the last line,because I don't think it's the strongest choice. Besides that,It's really beautiful. Best of luck! -
Wowwww, this was heartbreakingly beautiful. I realllyyy loved the entire idea behind this poem. It was realistic and original at the same time. You did an amazing job at portraying the seriousness of this situation and yet you did it in an interesting, poetic way. I truly loved this poem, great job and good luck in the contests.
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"Jumpin trains, buses
feet to the pavement,
headed for the star lights
of porcelain dolls and anorexic models,
longing for the glitter beyond suburbia."
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Oh my...just when I think that I have read the best poetry, you create another poem that has my jaw dropping. Incredibly vivid imagery brings this poem to life. WOW!!! I am standing as I applaud
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SO HONEST AND REAL!
Fake dreams are often the downfall of many, their false hopes dashed to pieces by a reality they never expected.
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So haunting
So much truth and so well expressed. Very touching.
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This is a great poem of how hopeful prom queens end up. Thinking there is no one prettier than they, only to be hit by the reality of Hollywood or Paris, there are 10 fold beauties. In the end they are too ashamed to go back home and say I was not good enough they become porn stars and hookers and "found broken and dirty in an alley". Well done Ami
YOU HAVE BEEN A BUSY LITTLE BEE MY FRIEND!
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wow
A very interesting and powerful write. The pic goes nicely. I loved the way you made prose flow. Nice, descriptive words and effective imagery. Loved it!
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Such a sad write of such truth. So many go seeking fame and fortune and end up dead on the streets, no one knowing whpo they are. Truly tragic. You have penned this expertly Kim.
Gaylene
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Behind the facade of unfortunate incidents and accidents strung together as a cause for lifelong agony and / or fame is hidden a structure built by the mind controllers, abductors and abusers of children as featured in the poem you placed on this page, creators of the monarch slaves:
http://www.whale.to/b/monarch_q.html
http://www.theforbiddenknowledge.com/hardtruth/illuminati_formula_mind_control.htm
And in the sad tragedy of reality, as you so accurately described, some of the slaves are granted doom (Harvey Lee Oswald) while others have been allowed to become stars (Elvis Presley and many well known musicians and actors). Reality runs deeper than the perception of the conditioned mob among who we live. Not many will be able to grasp the import of this write, but subconsciously messages are transferred. Precisely along similar lines as used by the mind controllers. Poets however do not in addition to that use agressive chemicals, abuse and psycho terror. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,
U
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All to often are these scenes portrayed in life. Wanting it all and finding the seedy side instead. Very strong statement on the issues facing the youths of tomorrow and today.
Love,
Mouser
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sad :( sad
Whatever happened to dear sweet Elaine
Livin' on reds, booze and cocaine
All you can say is...
'Aint it a shame
Truckin'... Grateful Dead
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