The night was young and so was our love,
nothing stood in our way.
We were so anxious to leave our past behind,
we dreamed about it every day.
Hand in hand we would run so far,
trying to leave this place and time.
Searching for answers to our unfulfilled lives,
seeing things we never could because we were blind.
We were so limited to what we could do,
our hearts yearned for more each day.
We knew that somehow we had to escape,
together we would find a way.
We left our lives to fate,
we put out hearts in each other's hands.
We knew that it had to be that way,
because no one would ever understand.
All of the pain and sorrow,
that we went through each day.
All of the hurt and lies,
that would always come our way.
It wasn't something that we wanted to do,
we never wanted it to be that way.
It was just so heartbreaking for me to see her cry,
I always promised her that I would take her away.
I promised her a life filled with happiness and love,
and all the things that she needed to survive.
I promised her that I would always be there for her,
and I'll keep that promise until the day that I die.
I love her more than anything,
she means the world to me.
Words could never describe all that I feel for her,
she is my destiny,
With every beat of my heart,
and every breath that I take.
I will be by her side forevermore,
never allowing her heart to break.
And if I should ever falter,
I pray that she will understand.
For my heart is filled with so much love,
so much more than I had ever planned.
Sometimes we would run for what seemed like forever,
never looking back at what we left behind.
We always looked to the future and not the past,
trying to find some peace of mind.
We knew that we could never return home,
we could never be accepted back.
For all of the things that we went through,
just threw our lives off track.
We fought for our rights and freedom,
and inspired each other with our hearts.
We made a vow to always be together,
and that nothing would ever keep us apart.
We were banished by our families,
and when I found this to be true.
It was then that my heart rejoiced,
I could finally do what I wanted to do.
I went over to her and asked her,
to spend the rest of her life with me.
I got down on one knee,
and I asked her to marry me.
She happily obliged and I knew,
that my life would never be the same.
We could finally settle down together,
and all of our happiness would forever remain.
We planned our wedding for the very next year,
we picked out my tuxedo and her dress.
We wanted everything to be perfect,
for our past lives were always a mess.
We spent every day together,
walking side by side.
We would smile and laugh together,
and kiss away the tears that we cried.
She was the kind of girl you could never yell at,
she was so sweet and full of life.
I just couldn't wait to walk down the aisle with her,
I couldn't wait for us to be husband and wife.
Then one day I got a call from a friend,
and as I listened to him I began to cry.
The woman that I loved had been killed in an accident,
and all I could do was cry out, "WHY?"
My heart broke into pieces,
my whole world just fell apart.
I knew that I could never move on,
without her next to my heart.
I cry each and every day,
hoping to hear her voice and feel her touch.
There's no escaping this madness inside,
I just miss her so very much.
She still lives in my heart,
and lives on in my dreams.
Her voice still echoes throughout my mind,
always cutting me at the seams.
She'll always be my greatest friend,
even though I know we're worlds apart.
I don't know if I'll ever get over her,
she's still there like she was from the start.
She's with me in my darkest hours,
I see her when I sleep.
She'll always be my guardian angel,
her memory I will always keep.
Until the day that we reunite,
in Heaven she will always be.
Looking out for me wherever I am,
inspiring and guiding me.
Sometimes I wish that it were me and not her,
I wish that I could somehow be with her tonight.
I wish that she would come and hold me,
and tell me that everything will be all right.
No matter where I am each day,
no matter what I do or say.
I'll never get over losing her,
I wish that it had never ended that way.
Author notes
Any Dream Will Do
Option #1
A contest entry
- Anything, just make me show emotion. by JulietteArielle.
300 points, ended April 13, 2007, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love u (7 options) by DestinyGets-Nervous.
400 points, ended May 31, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Crying... by near1202apocalypse.
450 points, ended January 14, 2008, 77 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Friends, I appreciate your comments and review on this write. However, please do not add my name to your comments due to the contest rules. Thank you very much!
Comments
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Dang I think this is the longest i have read from you it is really good. Good luck in bloodletters contest
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Have yet to read many of your works yet, Jeremy, but I think this one should count as 4 or 5 so you got some catching up to do. JK...lol. Was a loooooooooooong but beautiful write and well worth it and believe me I know sometimes it takes what it takes to say hat you have to say, plain as that. The exposure of your heart and feelings you have shared here with us was beautifully done and I commend you on this lovely work,
Evan
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This is a very deep, romantic, loving, passionate and very sad poem you have here my friend. *cries* I know what it's like to lose someone you love. You do always wish they'd still be there and wish somehow that you could take their place. I loved this. It broke through clear to my soul. You are a very talented writer and poet. Most of all you are a good friend of mine. I'm glad to have met you on here, and I'm glad to have been blessed to be able to read this absolutely stunning poem, and I will forever keep these words that you wrote in this wonderful poem in my heart, as I too have been through the things that evolve within your heart and words in this beautiful piece of poetry. God bless you and keep up the excellent work. Congratulations on winning silver & bronze for this if it would've been my contest I would have given this poem gold. God bless you and good luck in all that you do. I pray that God blesses you the chance to see her again.
Your friend
-Jöel-
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You took my breath away with this wonderful tribute to a dear departed loved one!!! My heart just crumbled at the end!!!
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This is a beaautiful ode to young love, very well written
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This is a very powerful and emotionally saturated piece. For me it flows very well in places and not very well in others. The rhyme is mostly good, but there are a few over used sounds "way, say, away" etc. It's also quite long winded, I'm sure you could be more succint, but then it might lose some of it's emotional clout so...don't listen to me!
I can't imagine anything much worse than losing a loved one...especially after they have set you free. Congratulations on the trophies already. Thanks for entering and good luck
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beautiful poem, almost made me cry. Though I really like it: the rhyming goes well, it's got good rythm, and everything elso to it (passion and emotion certainly), I think it's a bit too long and that the same things have been said multiple times in different words. But hey, lovely poem, great write
Good luck in the contest !
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Could really feel the emotion on this.
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OH THIS WAS DEEP.
POWERFUL STORY YOU PENNED HERE.
IT IS HARD TO GO ON WITHOUT THE ONE YOU LOVE.
I KNOW THAT FEELING.
WELL DONE HERE AND BEST WISHES TO YOU
ALWAYS
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This was sweet and sad. Rather beautiful actually. Some of the lines were a bit clumsy though. I'd rewrite the lines "Seeing things we never could because we were blind" and "And all of our happiness would forever remain" Other than that, nice.
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This really did make me cry!!!
This was a very sad, but very very lovely and beautiful poem!
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I really like this one alot very good imagery and good lenghth to bad I have not reach your level yet hmm good
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This was a heart-melting poem, I loved reading it. The subject is a bit of an overused one, but you penned this well enough to overcome that. Very few long poems hold my attention like this one did.
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its abit long.
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This is such a heart-wrenching and beautiful poem. It is such a prime example of the love that every girl wishes a guy held for her. You did a wonderful job capturing these emotions. Thank you so much for sharing this.
~Phoenix
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very beautiful poem good luck
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I don't know if this is true but if it is........speechless! I cried, seriously. I love this, it is all about the love you shared and none of it was ever wasted. You're proberbly still filled with love inside and your just waiting for the day that you see her again. Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest!
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wow, this is such a wonderful piece. It's quite sad as well. I liked the overall flow and rhythm of the piece. Very nicely done. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
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wow really great poem..such a twist to it..its beautifull and then it gets sad really great work!! very great talent you have..so keep on writing and good luck in this contest!!
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WHOA!!!!!!!! This sounds like me!!! I can soooooo relate to losing that one special person!! I have lost two very dear men to me! Well one, we were childhood sweethearts, and the other, was the one that was my soulmate in life and beyond. I sooo know the feelings of the loss!! God bless!! Congrats on the bronze.
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Whoa, you seriously made me cry. Up until the dying part, I could've sworn you were writing about me and my boyfriend. If you don't win, it'll be a miracle. Honestly.
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Wow, pretty much heartbreaking. It was beautifully written and all the emotion seemed completely sincere. One thing, you had some tense changes in stanzas six through nine. I'm not sure if that was intentional, so I'm just pointing it out. Thanks so much for entering and good luck!
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Angie Lynne
Thank you very much Angie!
I am glad that you enjoyed it.
Jeremy0826
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Yet again another beautiful poem. I loved this. It's heartbreaking*Oh such memories...* Thank you for entering, and good luck
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This is a tragically beautiful love story. I feel that is YOUR story as there is so much deep heartfelt emotion brimming for each and every line. So painful...to find the one who fills your heart soul only to lose her. This took us step by step through your discovery of each other and the growth of your love and commitment. It's long but well worth each flick of the scroll. Wonderful work!
~Lori
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Tragic love! niiiiiice Hmm...very Mr Shakespeare-esque, eh? I love that you made this not the typical 'and then we married' tra la la type! It's more real, and full of heart angst. Honestly, i prefer sad endings like this. So, excellent!! Never let go of those lost in our lives, for they are never lost from our hearts!!! Tru dat!
*Rianna
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Holly Crapolla, (haven't read yet, but am going to now) that's like a dang novel!!!!
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WOW... that was like... extremely long. LOL. yet.. was very pretty. You have done an excellent job writing this. I can see your whole heart splatterd on this page sweety. Keep it up. Good luck in the contest
Love,
~Krys~
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