Search for you amid the madness,
sure I have for all my days;
Crawl and cry through the night.
Live for that day when you arrive,
wait from now until the End;
Never give up the fight.
Can’t compromise, settle for less,
sweeter fate will ne’er be known;
From darkness through to light…
and our love shall set in stone.
Feel free to comment..and please read my other work..
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I don't think any of us should compromise or settle for less... but I do think at times we need to keep ourselves open to other possibilities, otherwise we may miss something we never knew we needed or wanted!
This is beautifully worded...
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Speechless all I can say..very well deserved for the gold my friend..
Amarige
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bravo
Short, tight and very well done with a good use of intermitant rhyme (which is almost always misused) I liked it a great deal... bravo... bravo... bravo..
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no poet is more deserving of these words than Cheryl....
I love this...a sigh is coming your way from a small island. Love, Lane
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Sweet little poem. Gold Trophy. Well, OK. Yes, sure. Of course.
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Still sigh over it....
Love it and love you for sharing it and loath Australian's who cannot see how funny they truly are to people like me who only search for the positive spin on anything. Pity the woman who puts up with the one below lol she must be a saint!! Much prefer my irishman
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Set in Stone
Search for you
amid the madness,
for all my days;
Crawl and cry
through the night.
Live for the day
when you arrive,
wait a million years or more;
Never give up the fight.
Can’t compromise
settle for less,
From darkness through to light…
and our love will set in stone.
And the reason why I didn’t comment is that Cannonsfire seems like a nice person as do you. That she has awarded a gold goblet for a poem that is so utterly choc full of clichés is staggering. And they are not just any clichés but ones that are so old they should have been pensioned off after the death of Chaucer. We have in this piece, “search for you, for all my days, through the night.” And then we hit a real literary high, putting in the hard yards with, “Live for the day, wait a million years or more – and now the real biggie - Never give up the fight” Even the title of this piece is a cliché. This is a horrible drab piece of writing that if it made the judge happy, terrific, what can I tell you except I found this to be a recycled bit of sentiment that would have greatly impressed me had you used just a couple of your own sentences rather than Banging together a Hallmark card (who probably would have rejected it for clichéd or given you a special prize for being the one billionth writer bereft of originality and opted for “Set in stone” “Never give up the fight” & of course, “Waiting a million years or more”
So Mat, if you think its poor form that I click on and not write a comment, as this piece did not have one redeeming factor except it was written for a nice person by a nice person but totally devoid of one cornel of originality, here’s your comment you have insisted I do for you. It is shithouse!!
David
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It appears rather unaustralian of you to denigrate somebody elses sentiments and had you known that this is deeply personal written for me then maybe you would have understood better. I like to think that we aussies do not sit in judgement of others but perhaps that does not apply to the entire population.
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“It appears rather unaustralian of you to denigrate somebody elses sentiments”
You have to be kidding me - quite the contrary- it is very Australian Cheryl and you know it. There you are Cheryl, sitting in the grandstand, barracking for the Calder Cannons, and are you thinking, “It appears rather unaustralian to denigrate somebody else’s sentiments” Now come on, that is bullshit and you know it. On this basis you really must have been incredibly caring and sharing with the Oakleigh Chargers fans last season when they ran over the top of you. “denigrate somebody elses sentiments” fuckin’ hell, let’s cut that shit out, Australians wouldn’t have anything to talk about if they did that.
David
we aussies do not sit in judgement of others – WHAT!!!!!!
and of course that too is an extraordinary statement of absolute bullshit as well- there you are sitting calmly agreeing with every umpiring decision in that grand final from those bastards in white. I don’t think so! Yes, George Bush is doing a great job, thank god we don’t sit in judgement of him.
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You are a mean one, Mr. Grinch
Wow. David. Think much before you speak?
It IS poor form to click on a 'featured' poem and not comment, whether you think the work a shithouse, or not. The poet spent points to feature their piece. So, shame on you. ...And shame on you for your indignant, knee-jerk response. Who are you to bash the sentiment of another?
Correct me if I am wrong, but Hallmark is still in business and doing rather well. Perhaps they sell common, heartfelt sentiment and clichés; and perhaps it is not original enough for you. But, what truly matters in this world is what is in one's heart... no matter how cliché it may sound.
That is the beauty of the words in this poem… a telling, of a human heart, beating in similar accord with all that have felt and loved and yearned and cried from the pain of loss; a heart that desires and treasures the depths of love. It is universal… touching all who possess a loving heart.
So, I now feel compelled to repeat a portion of an earlier comment I left for Mat (on “All Men” ...
"...If you (Mat) were able to infuse even a miniscule portion of your being into the minds and hearts of other men, this world would be a more beautiful place."
I know Mat very well. This piece truly spoke of his heart and soul; every word raw, heartfelt, and lived. His is a glorious heart, filled with valor and compassion and strength. To all blessed enough to call him ‘friend’, he is a wondrous treasure.
In the future, I would highly recommend that you think, and know; before you allow your mouth free reign in uttering insensitive tripe.
Well wishes,
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Well Stacy Anderson,
It would appear that you may well be more besotted by Mat than his poetry.
“I know Mat very well. This piece truly spoke of his heart and soul; every word raw, heartfelt, and lived. His is a glorious heart, filled with valor and compassion and strength. To all blessed enough to call him ‘friend’, he is a wondrous treasure.”
As a bit of sentimental, turgid, poetry sludge, it is by all levels of what constitutes art an absolute dreadful mess of clichés clobbered together by someone who derives a living from words; either legally or journalistically and this poem is just plain poetry pap.
But let’s be frank here. I was first IM’d to say, and Mat would understand this expression, trying to be a journalist, even if you don’t, that it wasn’t cricket to click onto a featured poem and not comment. I IM’d back telling him that his poem was crap and did he still want a comment. I was then instructed by Mat to “atleast make the comment.” And I did and I received an IM that it was an “intelligent comment”. I also was told that my own poetry is unhappy ramblings and shyte and that I am probably angry, overweight, divorced, cigarette smoking drunk- with the hook from Mat, “am I right?” Like two blind people touching different parts of the elephant and trying to guess the answer is “no” and I really don’t give a fuck what you think because I try commenting on the poetry and point out its flaws. And if you read my comments, I do praise where people have written well. And this particular case, although many would disagree with me because the poem was “soooooooooooo lovely” – which is your prerogative: But is it good? No its not. Not all his poetry because I have not read all his poetry; but this poem is appallingly written for all the reasons stated. And if Mat should feature a poem again and I was to see it loaded with tired old clichés and a lack of sparkle I would comment exactly the same way for it would still be horrible writing no matter the sentiment. In fact, as an irony to all this, I have read far better poems that are misspelt, no punctuation, bad meter, ordinary rhymes but there is something about the work that actually works, communicates, is authentic and breathes fire, or passion, or something that moves the soul. This does none of that. It does in a greeting card sense but not in a poetry sense.
Some people may not know the difference between a Rembrandt and an office mural nor would they care. For the one’s that don’t care, that’s fine. But for a lawyer, journalist and a person with such a “glorious heart, filled with valor and compassion and strength” – who knows, he may just want to improve on what is fundamentally crap writing.
David
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"It would appear that you may well be more besotted by Mat than his poetry."
Envious much?
Oh, that's rich. What a clever little boy you are.
Not.
Apparently you do 'give a fuck', Mr. D.P.R. Otherwise you wouldn't protest so much.
Just one question: Was your head up the elephant's arse?
Your comments are judgmental tripe, horribly pathetic, and completely uninspiring. In need of, but not worthy of pity.
You appear to be an angry little man; one that strives to make himself feel important by belittling others. I see no heart or true life in your poetry either; only mere observations as seen through obdurate eyes.
In summary, so there is to be no confusion...
Bored now.
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What a wonderful tribute to Cannonsfire..
and truly worthy of gold..Can’t compromise, settle for less,
sweeter fate might ne’er be known;
From darkness through to light…
and our love will set in stoneBeautiful
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A compact piece with sincerity,good flow and passion,particularly liked the set in stone,stone is natural,holds the vibrations throughout the ages and is both timeless and a foundation.A worthy trophy win with this touching piece
. Rewarded 4
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Thank you again Yvette!!!
Your gracious and generous overture has given my work exposure which in turn inspired me to write...which in turn got my work more exposure...You get the idea...Thanks again, Mat
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Nicely done...love set in stone, means forever to me...so these words of promise are beautifully written...thanks for sharing
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Ah a lovely piece for my delightful sis, I am sure she will love it. Nice rhythm and flow and the sentiments just touch the heart. Great work. Hey ignore the line counters, they count spaces, lol. Bunny
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Beautiful tribute to her...shes an awesome poet-ess...sweet and am sure she is smiling...good job CONGRATS oon the gold!
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such wonderful sentiments- just beautiful-
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Hi Matt, I think they are counting the line breaks in between as well. This is a wonderful piece you have created and despite it being short you have captured the brief very well with the piece. The emotion in those few short lines is overwhelming. Well done, I really enjoyed reading this. Claire
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Aw jeez, Mat. This was absolutely beautiful. But then, that's what I always find in your heart... true beauty. If I could have but one wish, she would embrace that beauty; and it would be sweet.
You brought the figures in stone to life through your poetic words; and made me feel.
Bravo, my friend. An exceptional piece.
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and good morning to you, too..
Thanks Sandy...your praise is quite the reward. I am humbled...Mat
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Wow this piece is just beautiful. It's reminds me of a romeo and juliet sort of love. 'our love will set in stone' that is so beautiful. Such a deep and powerful love piece.
Well done,
Lil xoxo
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Matt, this si so lovely on lots of levels, I know I commented before but I just wanted you to know, apart from the picture inspiration this speaks to my heart and I like that in a poem, it feels personal and I also like that when I read, I loved the thought 'sweeter fate might n'er be known' *sigh, makes me think if two hearts never met then they would never know love bloomed at all. It is just lovely and I thank you so much for entering your first piece in my contest.
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I am so glad its you lol, I fell in love with this and now I check my favs and spy your name, would I forgive dead space...but of course my sweet you're forgiven
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"Search for you amid the madness,
seems I have for all my days"
Impressive penning, Poet..Intense, yearning, profound in its depth & scope...As for your comments; I dunno; they apparently count dead air space, too. 
Good luck in Chez' contest...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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the yearning for love..timeless
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Beautiful
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