In a moment: change
Leaving everything known behind
Only to discover the heart always knew
Vitality suffuses the spirit and heals the body
Explosions of glorious dreams starburst in the eyes
Young and old cease to matter
One beat for two hearts now combined completely
Ultimate joy resulting from one single phrase
Author notes
my third acrostic...and I think my best...
In a list
A contest entry
- Pretty Little Rag Doll. by yesterdaysfeelings-.
750 points, ended June 15, 2007, 81 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PROVE YOU'RE WORTHY OF MY POINTS by EmeraldDaze.
480 points, ended June 5, 2007, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Honesty, please!
Comments
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem~ Keep up the good work~ Good luck to you in the contest!
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I like this poem. It could use some punctuation, but it was good. I didn't realize it was an acrostic until I read the Author notes. Thanks for entering my contest.
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i like this. it is good. =]. [[sorry. i would comment more. but i go blank after commenting alot. i dont like reusing alot of the same things so it makes commenting so often on contest difficult.]] so just so you know...i ran out of words so i'll just be totally blunt. this is a really great poem. thanks for entering my contest. and goodluck
-fabulous mistakes. -
WOW
Alright, no cheap analysis for this one. Thanks.
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welcome
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Honesty...
Well my dearest Cai, I can honestly say that this is spectacular. This may well be the finest piece I've ever seen from you. You have a tremendous talent inside...I look forward to reading you for a long time to come. I've a feeling that you're only just begining to come into your own as a writer, and it's staggering to think about how good you're going to get. Brilliant piece, and even more so because you've said so much in one smoothly written acrostic. Bravo Cai
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Caitlin, nice work!
I didn't know it was an acrostic unil I read your note. That is the sign of a great acrostic.
My only problem is line 4 second word is...what?
Good wording for the emotions felt.
Buddy
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suffuses...i forgot a letter, thanks for the heads up
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good acrostic
these are my favorite poems, I love how they read and yours tells alot in 8 lines. Two thumbs up!
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Wonderful!!
I am not very good at the technical stuff yet... but I can tell you I loved the way you described love in such a passionate way with so few words... This was Beautiful and I hope to learn from it and grow in my writing!
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This is really a good description of love at its best. I really like it!
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I honestly say that I liked it. It describes love too. Good work with it, in time you know they will only get better. ♥
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