When I don't see
his glowing smile,
my day feels incomlpete.
When I can't feel
his arms around me,
I feel so unsafe.
And when I'm not able
to hear his voice,
it's almost impossible
to listen to anything else.
Missing him
is the worst feeling.
It's as if I'll
never see him again.
A contest entry
- PREWRITE CONTEST>>>>BREAK_UPS by PersuingHappyness.
400 points, ended November 2, 2007, 37 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Not a bad write but I found it short. I think with a little more effort you would be able to create something really great. This has alot of potential to be great..Good luck in the contest
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Great little poem, simple, I like it. Sometimes few words is more, if you get me. Best of luck!
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What I liked: I liked how it had the emotional breakdown in it... those are in my opinon the best break-up poems....
But unfortuatly I didn't like how it was so short and barely had any sentence struture what-so-ever...
Thank you for entering in the contest, but I don't think that it will win.
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