reality is coming down on me
like the heat from a blistering sun
taking my time
trying my hardest
you are perfect for me or so i thought
but now i see that it's the biggest part of me
that you don't want to know
the part of me that loves and laughs
the part of me that shares and grows
the part of me that has been blessed
the part of me that shows the most
the part of me i can't hide
now i'm hiding it from you
but it's not the truth
no it's not real
i don't love you at all
but i love this part of me
to give this up would be a sin
and would undoubtedly lead me into depression
although there's no denying how i feel about you
there's also no denying who i am
when i think about this life
i'm forced to pretend there is no meaning
put up the fasade that i don't know
tell you it's okay not to care
but it's not okay with me at all
please don't make me tell you lies
for now i wont bring it up
for now i'll hold onto you
for now we'll play pretend
for now we'll be more than freinds
but now won't last forever my dear
i care for you and that's a fact
and i know you care enough
when i look into your eyes
my head is so confused
i quiver and sigh
but my heart dies out of frustration
give me a kiss, say goodnight
i'm sure we wont remember this tomorrow
but how can i forget.
A contest entry
- Teenage by Lj-.
300 points, ended May 30, 2007, 37 entries
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This exceeds the line limit.
Line thirty one:
"freinds" should be "friends"
Line twenty eight and forty:
"wont" should be "won't"
Expressive piece.
Thank you for your entry,
Best of luck! -
i can empathize with the whole having to realize nothing lasts forever thing, and trying not to look completely objectively at things when it's impossible to avoid an imminent collapse.
i'll give to you the advice i give myself, and that is to not take things too seriously, and if you already have, fall out of it, because the future is unstable.
listen to down and out by the academy is, there's a really good line in it toward the end that kind of encompasses what you're trying to convey here.
you're such a great writing-er.
and like my favorite person on the earth.
if nothing else lasts forever, our friendship will.
ily miss jessica.
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