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Now that I have lost you

We were two
But had one heart
There was a time when you and i
Lived as one
Your eyes were my eyes
Your lips were my lips
Your ears were my ears
And your heart was my heart

But now that we are apart
And now that I have lost you
I have grown blind
Now that I have lost you
I have grown mute
Now that I have lost you
I have grown deaf
And now that I have lost you
I’m afraid I can never love again
Because with you my heart still lies
And there is no way I can get it back

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  • trekkergirl
    October 28, 2008
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    Ahhhh another break-up poem. These are so easy to write and so full of emotions because almost everyone has broken up with someone. All you have to do is make your poem feel what you did when you had the break-up. Thanks for sharing this poem and thanks for entering it into my contest.


  • Aquamarine.
    July 9, 2007
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    wow this is good good luck


  • Not-The-Sun silver member
    June 26, 2007

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    i agree with everything in the previous comment and i applaud the emotion in this write. good luck and thanks for entering!!


  • Systems Malfunction
    June 25, 2007

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    Good

    This is a good poem...in a worn out genre. That being said, this is not the same as other people's "break up" poems. This is more of a loving type than a "I hate you, you idiot" type of poem. And for that I commend you. I'm happy to see that breaking up doesn't have to mean "I hate you", it can simply mean I'm sad and I wish we were still together. Good job! Good luck in the contest!