i.
just as insubstantial,
a my name-
vapor, evanescent in
the gloaming gleam-
where i stare sorrow in the eye,
echoeing each epiphany
of blame,
& the guilt- only mine.
i might, rain, too;
in the umbra split of ying
& yang's sibling squabbles.
ii.
my memories merge,
with loose-leaf idealism-
crumpled in corners
of gnawing neglect;
you see,
pretend are the pictures-
& words withering in
terrible truths.
iii.
toppling the concave cracks
of the mirror
in moonlight-
reflections off the waters
of cried river ripples.
glaring:
grief within,
the remnant of -
...my reflection.
A contest entry
- Final Fantasy Fans...this Contest is for YOU!! by grrlshadow.
600 points, ended March 27, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Should the second line say 'as'? And what about 'echoing' for the sixth line?
The different sections work very well here.
DancingRed.
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He stares blanly into space gazing at the sea, bound to a wheenchair. calling for Tifa
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i got a GOOD Cloud!! this makes me very happy!! i love this entry. thank you so much! this contest was awesome.
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This is soooooooooooooooooooooooooo amazing. I don't know what to say.
echoeing each epiphany
of blame,
& the guilt- only mine.
i might, rain, too;
in the umbra split of ying
& yang's sibling squabbles.
Those lines are beyond lovely. Yes, those lines are so lovely. -
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don't read th poem before this, I made it deliberately cliche for a contest. It was my requirement. lol
Thanks for the comment!
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