A little secret for me to share
My heart could be classed as stone
But the comfort bringer to my friends
But no peace I bring to my own
I cannot share in love experience
I have had very little to tell
But my heart I have locked
And barricaded well
I see my friends in trouble
All because of hearts
So to protect myself
I've placed it distances apart
So forgive me my weakness
I don't know how to act
I know how to bring comfort
But not to interact
So I plead guilty
To a heart of stone
I can't let anyone close
I keep it my own
I want to give it to someone
To let them hold it for me
But I'm too scared i'll get hurt
Or no-one will want me
So my secret it out
Please don't judge too fast
I desperately want love
But I want it to last
Please tell me what you think
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At this stage of your life many will be eager to look after your heart. Whether they will do it in the manner you want is a different matter. Hope it will be the right person and your stony heart will melt with love. And how long that love will last nobody knows - let us hope it will last forever and you will live happily ever after.
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Aw, i'm sad now... Damn yr powerful poemz.
I really like your use of rhyme, it's practical and it always fits, but it's not strictly conventional, which is maybe just as much of a statement, if not moreso, than not making stuff rhyme at all.
Much respeck. Yeah, respeck. You got it.
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Excellent!
I can perfectly relate to this.. Are you sure you are not ME writing this??
Excellent wording and flow.. I can really feel you there. and especially here:
"But the comfort bringer to my friends"
Hell! I know what that is like.. people even start to say..we never see you cry or you are soo strong.. *that it makes me weak!*
I would remove the "but" in the third line though.. You could make it like this "A comfort bringer..." instead.
I may be out of applauds but this poem deserves all 3! So you shall get them!
Keep on writing,
Nooni
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The words are simple, but mean a greater picture.But my heart I have liked. Nice!
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This is a sad poem I can relate to your feelings.
I want to give it to someone
To let them hold it for me
But I'm too scared i'll get hurt
I dont trust many people with my heart so i do understand that for sure this is a nice write thank you for sharing -
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Thank-you very much for your comment, and I hope that we can eventually find someone who will look after our hearts, in the way they need to be treated. Take care XxX
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