breaking through the skin
sinking in the brain
taking in breaths
waiting patiently
to choke and suffocate upon red
letters for the better
deathly desires to kill thats enchanted
given, then granted
rip the sky wide open
let the angels fall forever in eternity
blind the world with the gaze of blood engulfed empathy
searching and striving
living in streams of misery
letting go of the long forgotten reminders of mortality
fallen asleep under a human failure
sitting in agony letting the pain
eat you from the inside out
singing deathly lullabyes
screaming “this little light of mine.”
when the smoke suddnely clears, the ashes hit the floor and the light goes out...
bring the fire
bring the pain
I'm the one that dies in vain,
pour the wine
pour the poison faster
down the back of my throat
slide down the chains of my freedom and make me choke upon my own words
-I’m hanging on by only a mere thread, slowly dying
-tear the chains from my tendons
-rip my heart out
-kill me indefinately
-deprive me of life
-finish the job
nothing is easier.........................
Author notes
um yeah no idea wher this came from kinda was just listening to The Autmn Offering and yeah...
A contest entry
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600 points, ended April 18, 2007, 97 entries
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letting go of the long forgotten reminders of mortality
fallen asleep under a human failure
sitting in agony letting the pain
eat you from the inside out
I think that was my favorite part. It's hard to let go and pain does eat you from the inside out. It can destroy everything that you are. I love this write.=]
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Oh my gee golly wiz.
I am IN LOVE with this. Dark poetry is freakin amazing, and you did this quite well.
Oh jeez.. lol this is awesomely done.
I loved how you ended it.
Nicely done!!!!
-System of Cyanide
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sticks tounge out at you
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OMG!!!!!You are absolutly amazing I love you so much you are an amazing writer holy mother of the devil I love you so much<3laney
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wow bro!! this is awesomness! im trying to find my fav part..... *trys* ARRRGH all the parts are fantastic!!!!
i love every part of this.
love love
ya lots
xx
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I love the poems that come outta nowhere. They always seem to be soooooo freaking great!! Ugh, and you're sooo good at writing! Anyhoo.. I love EVERY part of the poem. It's just like, perfect in every way possible! The end is deffinately my fave part though. Anyways, keep it up *hugs*.
~*!ox_Kat_xo!*~
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wow this is a really amazing poem. i love the way it is scattered about in the end. it adds to it a lot. you can really feel the emotions that are flowing through this poem and you do a really good job of that. Great write and keep it up!
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this is amazing, wow. I love at the end how all the pieces of the poem are scattered... This is perfect. Absolutely beautiful
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