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My Immortality

 

Listen to my enchanting song—

an ode to immortality.

 

Hear it in the falling leaves—

pirouetting towards their kin.

 

Can you catch whispers on breezes?

Ancients words unknown to you.

 

Murmurers of crashing waves—

darkened talk between undying evil.

 

Whether I say it is good or bad,

will you believe?

 

My blessing is a curse on some—

more than others.

 

Cutouts of dreams scatter across plains—

all the time to never fulfill them.

 

Toast to the death of delirium—

such beauty to be lost.

 

Bestrew across the grassland—

nevermore's darkened domain.

 

I believe in the immortal race—

though you cannot see us,

we are always here.

 

An aeon of watching others die—

grimly knowing I will never join them.

 

Yet they will get the last laugh—

as they lie on their death beds.

 

I am for my oppression—

for I fear what shall never come.

 

Though I get sick of day after day—

tethered to human suffering.

 

We are the immortals—

here before the stars were born.

 

Whatever you call us—

we are the undying nation.

 

Hiding in the world's recesses—

waiting for human end.

 

Though after an eternity of life—

the simple pleasures go away.

 

How I envy human love of life—

for they, unlike us, end.

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Oh my goodness, I am so sorry this turned out to be so long. But my muse just started going and WHOOSH, there was no stopping it! I'm not sure if this was what you wanted, but I hope you enjoyed it alright.

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  • Aurora Calliope
    March 27, 2007

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    My friend, your opinion on long and mine vary greatly, this is in no way too much for me to handle, and I would have been quite content to go on reading another hundred lines or so before even thinking of getting bored!
    Firstly i would like to welcome you to my contest, and thank you for entering. There is nothing i like better than signing onto AP and finding such marvellous poems entered in my contest, especially nice fresh writes for me to comment on. (I like it even better than getting comments on my own poems, though that does please me as well)
    Secondly, to your poem, I thought you did a very good job of capturing the boons and banes of Immortality. Surely there is a great deal of opprotunity behind such long life, the chance to do innumerable things where in life we are only ever able to do a few. At the same time, you have managed to capture the tragedy of such an infinate lifespan as well, the sorrow of having to watch all that you love and care for passing away, a heavy responsibility indeed.
    Myself, i would certainly prefer a mortal life to an immortal one, for which is better? To plant a tree and know that it will grow and exist long after you have passed away, or to plant a tree, watch it grow and exist, and then watch it pass away? A life of immortality would certainly be a difficult one, and wearying after a time, and often it is the knowledge that we will not be on this earth forever that makes our experiances here so valuble.
    A most admirable read, well thought out and beautifully expressed, Excellent work and thanks again for entering, good luck in this contest!