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Twenty nineteen

 

 



I see -

The eagle fucking some young swan
breeding stoned warriors
for yet another bloody soiree,
well along I’ll be by then.

Some pale shade you might not see
directly.
Though with crackly tuner
and new remote
you might hear my scratchy words
replayed on channel one
where there are pictures of our noble birds
all dying of disease.

You’ll be concerned with the last bitch
the bastard that took the portable deep freeze
but that won’t mean shit to me
I won’t be able to leave
till I lay some heavy words
on some new age hippie jesus freak
who mumbles a lot in his sleep.

Leave them  my regret,
just like they’ve done to me
as the machine grinds slowly on
piling the white stones in neat rows.

I don’t give a fuck
how you get it done
as long as you put blood in the words
and the Doge falls to the bottom of the boat.

 

 

 

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  • Kendall Campbell
    April 5, 2007

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    It was easy to tell that everything in the poem was there for a very deliberate reason. It all culminated together, the allusions and metaphors, to send a very strong message.


  • Heart Sutra
    April 1, 2007
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  • passionvine
    March 27, 2007

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    Seems Like All My favorites are Prophets these days

    One of my favorite songs to play and sing:

    I wish I was in Carrickfergus,
    Only for nights in Ballygrant
    I would swim over the deepest ocean,
    For my love to find
    But the sea is wide and I cannot cross over
    And neither have I the wings to fly
    I wish I could meet a handsome boatsman
    To ferry me over, to my love and die

    But in Kilkenny, it is reported,
    On marble stones there as black as ink
    With gold and silver I would support her,
    But I'll sing no more 'till I get a drink.
    For I'm drunk today, and I'm seldom sober,
    A handsome rover from town to town,
    Ah, but I'm sick now, my days are numbered,
    Come all you young men and lay me down.

    The tune is mournful the lyrics self mocking but sad

    I see your white stones and the handsome boatman here

    And the sickness and need to leave something engraved in gold and silver on marble slabs

    “O what fine thought we had because we thought
    That the worst rogues and rascals had died out.”

    They are among us still, but mutated into ravenous vultures

    The eagles are ducklings ugly metamorphed into vultures, indignant desert birds

    But the gyre is inverse they sweep down to feast on the corpse of the revolution undone the solitary soul, the swan

    Coarse prophecy is here magician – mocks the mockers yes but more –

    Poems bring down Doges, Emperors, and Wanna be Cowboy kings

    One hundred years after Yeats prophesy – the dirge is a hurdy gurdy cackle

    Or the klaxon bells of a worn ice cream truck – and a pedophile predator behind the wheel

    Peace.


  • PerVirtuous
    March 27, 2007

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    YOU ARE...

    fast becoming one of my favorites... If you keep this up I will make you a bunny farmer quickly! Three more bunnies for this superb effort!


  • NurseChilly gold member
    March 27, 2007

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    Alas poor Yorrick, I knew him Horatio..... ... bare thy arms and entrench them in blood!!

    even the TV sucks us dry these days...

    damn this is good... .. I don't care if I don't understand it all .... ... I love reading, re-reading and digging.....

    all those frogs and princes.... what is a girl to do, but run like fuck....... ... I ain't kissing none of those bastards....


    grand stuff mr strangeguitar man.. ...


  • cvillelisa
    March 27, 2007

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    I think you've been:

    1. Reading Yeats
    2. Perhaps reading Merchant of Venice?
    3. Telling us some things never change -- and it seems to me that is what the "serious artist" seeks in writing poems "the indestructible"

    Though I may have also made that up in my head. Love this for all the layers and allusions. Last stanza is just perfect -- though really like the jesus hippie line too. Strong opening as well. Eagle has so many allusions -- money, America, freedom. Be back to look at this one more -- I like making up my own stories and wondering how close I come to what you were thinking when you wrote it.

    Good luck in the contest. Lisa


  • Desiree Darkk
    March 27, 2007

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    Lute turning into contest whore. Use fuck 2 times and a bastard and bitch thrown in as a bonus. Said shit too. World coming to an end.


  • ca ne fait rien
    March 27, 2007

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    Pull glide pull glide past the white markers, past the wargraves past the swans tangled in the wire. I was trying to forget about that- I took photogrpahs of swans in Whitby Harbour with the Abbey in the background. Net day it was on TV local news how someone had shot the swans. I should be hardened to all this at my age but it all seems to make me more sick now than it used to do when I was young. I mean, I used to mind, but not enough to vomit or cry real tears about it, but I do now.
    Twenty Nineteen. Somehow the nomenclature for this century is so ugly.

    Have clapses.

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