Soft Her touch, harsh Her voice
Controlled anger Her tool
Blindfold on wall i rest
With arms restrained and
Legs apart at Her command
i wait for Her will
my ears hear it before i feel it
Her flogger meets my breasts
Each strike i count and thank Her
Her temper is contained yet
She wields Her flogger with expertise
my punishment is not Her pleasure
For anger is Her motive, but
Love is Her only true tool.
A contest entry
- Erotica... with a challenge by Baahltres.
900 points, ended April 14, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Harsh punishment but done out of love. I really enjoyed reading it. Wonderfully done.
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*smiles*
This is well written girl, with a very good understanding of the subject...
*nods thoughtfully* it is rare to see a sub who understands that the punishment is as hard on her Mistress as it is on the sub... Well Done!
I will be looking out for more of your work!
~DragonSong~
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hugs My girl, well done sweetheart
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This is just to let you know that I have read your poem. I will be commenting on poems after the contest is judged. Thank you for entering and good luck!!!
~.~Yvonne~.~
Baahltres -
*wonders what rascal may have done to earn this* fantastic rascal. I always love to read erotica or things with a bdsm slant from you. You've been there done that and there are just things people cannot relate to unless its been felt or experienced in some form or another.
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a rare writing from what i have read here so far.
good real good
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I would have to agree with crockogold. It could use with a little more fleshing out. (No pun intended, haha.)
And in this bit:
[Blindfold on wall i rest
With arms restrained and
Legs apart at Her command
Though not restrained i am bound]
I think "restrained" was a bit repetitive the second time, and made it slightly confusing to me.
Other than that, this write has awesome potential and good luck with the contest!
<3 MxOrpheus
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5/10
too simple
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