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No Sleep, No Day Time

Roses are what I gave
You said that they made your day
The happyness inside took over
i felt that your love was strong in me

then two months later your seem not to care

Things don't matter as much

 

Your love is still there but

But i don't know what to do

I want to see your love and affection

but it may not be your thing to show

to show how you feel

But that is sad

sad because you are mine

my other, someone that can share anything.

anthing with me, the good the bad

and the random.

I dont care I LOVE you and thats all that matters

 

 

 

 

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  • The Hardest Goodbye
    July 9, 2007

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    very good poem. it could use some work. but it was cool. Anyways, thanks for entering it in my contest good luck
    xo
    kandy


  • emherr
    March 27, 2007

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    don't lie this is a good poem and i can tell you really put your feelings into it! i really respect that!


  • -8-nicole-8-
    March 27, 2007

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    Roses are what I gave
    You said that they made your day
    The happyness inside took over
    i felt that your love was strong in me

    then two months later your seem not to care

    Things don't matter as much



    Your love is still there but

    But i don't know what to do

    I want to see your love and affection

    but it may not be your thing to show

    to show how you feel

    But that is sad

    sad because you are mine

    my other, someone that can share anything.

    anthing with me, the good the bad

    and the random.

    I dont care I LOVE you and thats all that matters


    • Drummerfreak909
      March 27, 2007
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      I dont understand your comment. you just reposted the poem. Is it ment to be how i should have wrote it?