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Three Graves (Ballad Verse)

There are three graves in Texas
my father bade me keep,
beside the somber fencerow,
along the hillside steep.

They stood collecting dust
before I was conceived,
and yet my blood runs in the soil
Beneath the hickory trees.

I never held her hand;
I never saw her face,
and yet I remind him of the girl
who rests in that grey place.

She lies beside her siblings
in a stern and narrow row,
a sister and two brothers
that I will never know.

Their mother does not come here
for their mother is not mine.
Sawbriar would cover their gravestones
and grass and muscadines,

but for the ministrations
of calloused, sturdy hands
hardened by years and hardships,
and the  working of the land.

Curved and iron fingers

trace the names craved in the stone,

and bristled lips swear softly

that they will never lie alone.

 

My roads may take me far from here,

far from the Lone Star State

to lands of steel and concrete

to an unknown urban fate,

 

but there are three graves in Texas

that I will not forsake,

and while I live I will come back

and a constant vigil make.



 

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  • Dixie Dawn gold member
    July 6

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    You are Texan indeed, and it shows in your writting here, and I love it. I also love the history in this, its what pulled me here! A Great write!


  • Cup-a-Joe
    May 19, 2007

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    Excellent

    I like the flow. In my H.O. , the one's that that just comes out, are the best.
    I can also connect with the subject.
    Joe


  • TravisF
    May 6, 2007

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    Very nice not perfect, as you said a bit 'patchy' but good stuff none the less. Sad and touching, bravo.


  • The Poetic Bandits gold member
    April 2, 2007

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    3 claps...9pts

    Reward from The Poetic Bandits reading list

    ~Lilac


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 30, 2007

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    Sentiments well expressed in these lines - easy to read and understand the words you share here - three graves so far from you that bring you back to your roots and your family.

  • June-bug
    March 29, 2007

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    excellent

    I didn't think the flow was off and the imagery and content are super. It is wonderful that one will take to the time to tend to those who have traveled on as they are so often lost as we tend to life. A pleasure to read words from the heart.


  • Lady Altheia
    March 29, 2007

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    Awww, this is lovely and I didn't feel it was off. I am sorry you never got to meet your other siblings. I think it is very devoted of you to visit their graves.


  • -Ink Artist-
    March 29, 2007

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    This is different from what I typically read from you. I felt the flow was pretty smooth in all but one or two spots. The story behind the words is an intriguing one that kept me very interested the whole way through the read. Nicely done, my friend!


    ~Lori

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    March 29, 2007

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    I enjoyed reading this one, although it was bittersweet, it had that southern charm ring to it, as you would expect to find from a true texan. well done.


  • Twinstar
    March 28, 2007

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    Great!

    This is really well done and a wonderful tribute to family members you never knew. I lived in Texas for 8 yrs and I know all about those Fire Ants. I was formaly introduced to them 3 days after I moved there in my bare feet in the back of our trailer, I learned real quick to keep my shoes on in Texas, I met a scorpian that way too, but I was in the house, so I decided I better where something on my feet inside too.
    I really enjoyed reading this poem, you did an excellent job on this piece!
    Love & Light
    Debbera


    • Ontarah
      March 28, 2007
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      Oh yea, fire ants, bullnettle, scorpions. We have all kinds of nice things in Texas.


  • My Solitude
    March 28, 2007

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    GREAT

    Ontarah, I've grown pretty fond of your writings, and this one is no exception!! I liked this story very much. U've done a great job here. I liked the way u narrated the tale with such precision and elan. Keep writing baby, u are massively talented!
    Love, Bob.


  • Vagabond
    March 28, 2007

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    A stunner Ontarah, to be sure! your right, the rhythme and rhyme are off a little here and there, but overall the story is well told, and the language you used was most admirably chosen! you managed to convey yourself very well in this poem, I am impressed (its hard to do!)


  • just-an-amateur
    March 27, 2007

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    I see nothing patchy about it, and the rhyme caught my eye. This is so true, there are so many graves left unkept because of family and I'm sorry for your loss. It's great to see that these little ones mean so much to you though. Good job!
    ~Megan~


  • ronnica
    March 27, 2007

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    It is wonderfully human, endearing, sad and there is excellence in every line. I would like to read again if you edit,


  • oldmanriver1942
    March 27, 2007
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    Excellent!!


  • ShelleyA gold member
    March 27, 2007

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    Excellent title. A heartfelt write. Very good imagery, flow and rhyme. Lovely depth of feeling. Very good word choice. Good descriptives. Good alliteration and assonance. A well crafted piece.


  • blondone
    March 27, 2007

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    very emotional write, the saddness of it all, I think the words flow with ease, a real image of the graves appeared, perfect title for these words, well done...

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