I saw you standing at the dark edge of forever,
in the mists of the haunted wood
where once long ago, when you were my lover
among the nightshade paths we walked,
the moon light fell, casting shadows dark and deep
This haunted wood within my dreams
That I had made my home
danced and swayed in this charade
and within the mist and rain and smoke
howling winds splayed the limbs that bent and snapped like bones
and the clouds cried and bled cold tears
upon the these woods where our hearts roamed
You stand within the edge of darkness made so crystal clear
this looking glass with no way out and no way in
And though I seek the love that lies within your saintly castle keep
the dark edge of forever lies within my bower dark and deep
A contest entry
- Shadows by Danna Hobart.
390 points, ended October 12, 2008, 28 entries
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Fantastic poem, flows nicely while still brinnging forth a meaning thats very deep
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Well, this is different. I don't usually like fantasy-like pieces, but the second half of this one really flows nicely. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Thank you. I dont usually write fantasy peices, but it just seemed to flow.
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Astounding...your details are very well written out! I felt pain behind every line. Very good piece
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OMG! Beatifully Writen!
You have a wonderful talent. Never stop writing you have a gift. I really really love this poem it really makes me think. The Best of Luck! -
well thought out,well wrote.It is alittle dark for my taste,but i liked it
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I really enjoyed this poem. It was amazing. The imagery was brilliant. Great write!
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Wonderful
Amazing write. The picture given from the words is work all it's own.
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