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Buried In The Basement - (Acrostic)

 

Buried deep in this ghost filled basement

Useless, desperate and lonely silence surrounds me

Reaching the stupid frightened unworthy souls I have collected

Ideal cemetery of silent terror, murder and confusion

Endless hurt, hate and anger fill my sinking dream nightly

Depression, suicide and death, chisel their way into my willful mind

 

Innocence and courage replaced by awesome pain

Numb are my drowning thoughts of my affliction

 

Tense scared expressions leave me emotionless

Hell is nothing to this asylum I call my life

Ever the existence of pills and smell of stale alcohol

 

Blood falling to the cold stone floor

Axe and knife my instruments of torture

Scissors used masterfully in these skilful hands

Empty heart failing to see only beauty in death

Murderous minds spiteful of their victims wish to die

Ending with their ripping gestures of final peace

Now I lie, as I amaze myself in my seething rampage

To return again tomorrow with another unsuspecting victim

 

 

Author notes

OPTION #1 WoRDBANK-51 words used-Suicide, death, axe, chisel, knife, scissors, pills, alcohol, beauty, skilful, courage, willful, blood, ripping, ghost, tanse, asylum, drowning, sinking, reaching, failing, falling, useless, nothing, stupid, unworthy, numb, silence, basement, cemetary, buried, murder, silent, terror, frightened, scared, hate, wish, dream, amaze, lie, die, awesome, pain, hurt, anger, confusion, depression, lonely, desperate.

Option #2-Title- BURRIED IN THE BASEMENT

Author freespirit51

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  • Riamh
    August 3, 2008
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    Awesome! Vivid, stark and beautiful. Well done!


  • Just waiting
    August 20, 2007
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    nice piece. thanks for entering good luck.


  • illegalfairy
    May 21, 2007

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    first off i love the picture. its very creepy and disturbing. The poem was very good. very disturbing but awesomely written. The acrostics that you used were very good. I really enjoyed reading this. Great job and thank you for entering it into the contest.


    • freespirit51
      May 22, 2007
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      Thanks for your very kind comment. I am glad it touched you in some small way.


  • Bruised.Roses
    April 13, 2007

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    this was a really good poem...I really like the poem that you made and the acrostics that you used were realy good your poem was very powerful and emotional keep writitng your talented
    xXTashaXx


  • wanderingstarlet
    April 12, 2007
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    i liked it.... it was interesting. thx for entering.


  • Souless Poet
    April 4, 2007

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    Bravo! a very well written poem!
    I love the style and the story within good use of the word bank.

    Take Care.


  • jacieluves 20you
    April 2, 2007

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    lynn

    hey its me whats upme not to much here i am glad you wanted to here from me again you are the best at writer to tho well see ya later


  • david0go0away
    March 28, 2007
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    wow thats all i can say WOW WOW WOW its WOW


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    March 27, 2007

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    WoW!!!!!!

    This is just to DARK for youCoolyou can just write about anything you want to cant you?Well it was good as far as dark goesyou are the master my friend and your poem a winner


  • x Bright Eyes x
    March 27, 2007

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    i thought this was great loved the acrostic just amazing good luck and thanks for entering my contest much apricated

  • pruedence
    March 27, 2007

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    This is dark...the picture is scary...I love the poem...I could picture the dark basement, where this awful creater lived...coming out only in the night to find another victim...very thought provoking...very well done, good luck in the contest..thanks for sharing


  • Chanting Whisper
    March 27, 2007
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    Wow,dark I like it,good job on this one.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 27, 2007

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    what an icky picture. i hope i do not have nightmares tonight. the write goes so well with it. when i do long acrostics like this, i always wonder about punctuation. i have several like this, without the periods and such and i have others including it. i suppose it is a personal preference. this is wonderful and i wish you the best of luck in this contest. viyanna rosemarie


  • Desert-Liliaceae
    March 26, 2007

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    Wow. this was really intense. this was a great write that i enjoyed reading. i'm not usually a huge fan of acrostics but this wasn't bad at all. great job, keep up the awesome work. :

  • EncounteredEpiphany
    March 26, 2007
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    wow


  • The Cold Truth
    March 26, 2007

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    VERY NICE!

    i love acrostic poems! they take a master poet to be able to write and still make any sense! one of the very best acrostic poems i have ever read... this deserves some major praise!!

  • in-the-twilight
    March 26, 2007

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    This is amazingly dark and flowing! Wow I loved it! I think poems using the word banks are great and this proves it! Rock on! xoxo Meg


  • soulfultia gold member
    March 26, 2007

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    Well you reached out and grabbed hold of the reader and just kept us glued until the end. A word bank...always a nice challenge, but to pull off an acrostic and still have exellent rhythm coursing through your ink is pretty awesome. I haven't read your work in a bit, and I see I have been missing out!! I think you did an outstanding job on this and I would love to see you win the shiney! Good luck in the contest and this was certainly my pleasure to read this evening ~Tia


  • yourbentangel
    March 26, 2007

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    tantalizing

    This was absolutely wonderful. Dark and tormenting but wonderful all the same. I think the acrostic worked well with the wordbank theme and you did an awesome job.. Thanks for posting


  • angel-kyra
    March 26, 2007
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    amazing,

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