But he said it twice,
Yes, he said it two more times,
Even as I waved good-bye.
Bereaved and so sad,
Yet, once more I called to him,
Ever so slightly I, too, smiled.
A contest entry
- Acrostic Sedokas {edit} by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended March 31, 2007, 12 entries
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Beautiful piece you have written. I like your inspiration for it, too. Thanks for taking my challenge.
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Nice job
Maybe he really meant to say bye, two times . He was leaving. nice job here.
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clever indeed
doris this is brilliant- the pathos is so enveloping-the sadness reaches out and stays with you-you have done a wonderful job here -
I would take another look at your syllable count. Remember:
The SEDOKA (which you spelled wrong in your title) has syllable counts of 5/7/7 - 5/7/7
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