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I Await You

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Flowing winds
larger than life’s
petty consequences
hold me back.

You traverse
the barren places
of your lonely nights
to reach me.

My high walls contain
the hidden doors
you seek to love me.

I hide among
the maps;
I sent you
the illusions you follow.

To make real
the doorways to my soul
you fight the winds
I fear.

And I await you.








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  • masterblaster gold member
    April 13, 2007

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    Hi,nice romantic poem, yes the person in the pic could well be waiting for someone, a sweet write, all the best in the comp,hugs Di


  • melphleg gold member
    March 30, 2007

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    Relate

    Being single, I relate to this as a longing to find love or love to find me. It also seems to speak of barriers put in place that ironically help prevent that from happening.


    • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
      March 30, 2007
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      I think that humans and society are riddle with barriers and we all do the best we can to move past the
      thanks for reading and commenting. ken


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    March 26, 2007

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    Oh I Did Love This....

    This graphic stirs all kinds of emotions and thought processes.

    I liked where you took this one. So deep and introspective and ... telling in a tender way. It is almost as if she were to reach the door, it would be opened for her...

    Excellent penning my friend. Very nice indeed. ~Pamela


    • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
      March 26, 2007

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      It is an awesome graphic, dipicting the feminine strength and I have no doubts to the quest's success


  • Night Hope gold member
    March 26, 2007

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    "To make real
    the doorways to my soul
    you fight the winds
    I fear.

    And I await you."

    Ooohhh, my Friend...This is such a lovely penning...& I adore the Durwaigh Gallery...This is a beautiful reaching on your part, Poet...I think she might just hear your heart's please...Gorgeous write, Sweetie...Good luck in the contest... Wanda


  • crisstiena
    March 26, 2007

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    Late evening finally
    comes: I unlatch the door
    and quietly
    await the one
    who greets me in my dreams
    ~ Otomo No Yakamochi (718-785)

    Your poem is a profoundly moving and deeply affecting piece. I know what it feels like to wait.  I await you - gives me some idea of the conflicting emotions that must go through the mind of the one who waits. It is powerful writing, and emotional. The effect of your words lingers, and reminds us that poetry speaks to something within us all. And that is something
    that this work definitely achieves.

     

    I am very much liking your poetry.

    ♦ crisstiena

     



    • Night Hope gold member
      March 27, 2007
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      {hugs my crissygirl} Ken, meet criss. She's adorable. She's a very dear Friend of mine...& an incredibly gifted Soul. Love you, criss.

    • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
      March 26, 2007
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      I thank you, and I like the quotes you place as they are very relevant. ken


  • Whoochi gold member
    March 26, 2007
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    oh what a good write...do we all have walls/doors...oh metaphorical masterpiece...

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