There's screaming all around
And poison in the air
I feel my body shaking
But nothing's really there
My stomach starts to churn
My heartbeat quickens
My mind goes numb
As the air thickens
My body goes cold
And my throat goes dry
I cant scream
Or ask those around "why?"
"Why is this happening?
Why cant I get out?
Why cant you hear me,
No matter how I shout?"
My heart stops its beat
And my eyes roll back
I finally feel at ease
As the world goes black
Author notes
This usually happens to me as I try to fall asleep or it becomes a nightmare.
A contest entry
- dark and sad rhyming poems please by nobodys-girl.
425 points, ended April 25, 2007, 66 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make Me Feel Dark by Xsafety glassX.
375 points, ended April 29, 2007, 59 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
You dont have to comment, but I would like to know what you think.
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Heya..this was a great poem..your words were strong, powerful and emotional..this poem reminded me alot of me and i enjoyed reading this very much..you are very talented keep writting and take care
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thank you very much for your comment. ^-^
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YAY!!! a great and dark poem!! im just wondering if shes like being choked...but its still a great write!! thanx for entering my contest!
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O.O you guessed right! Actually, yes, she is being choked. Nobody has ever guessed right before... they usually give me weird looks and ask if I'm feeling alright... losers... lol! thanks for the comment!
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o...i wuz right? that never happens b4...it sounded like it wen u said:
My body goes cold
And my throat goes dry
the troat goes dry part got me...again thanx for entering...is this the 2nd poem u put inhere cuz ur pic looks familiar... -
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Yea, I decided this poem fit in with the contest too and I entered it.
The poem describes someone who is, i guess you could say, kidnapped and being abused until they eventually die. -
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both, being abused on a daily basis until finally finishing her off. kinda like tormenting her until she's dellirious.
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...hehe...dude this is so funny not to share...go to this website:
http://www.totse.com/en/bad_ideas/guns_and_weapons/npoison.html
its about ninjas and poison...god this is so funny...im srry if i got off topic...but this is just so stupid... -
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and the dude never used the letter f anywher...idiot...
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lol. dude, i gotta try that with my mortal enemy! mwahahah! ehem...
he sure liked to say s*** alot... -
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i kno dude...that guys an idiot...the cops dont ride around on horses anymore and he spelled everything that wuz supposed to b an f with ph...thats so funny...dont ask Y or HOW i got on that website cuz i honestly dont know
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y do u keep adding 5 stars to everything i say...*ahem* TYPE??
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wow this is short...
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*shrug* i give everyone 5 stars.
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ooo very interesing...and very good. i love the last two lines the most! well thankyou for entering my contes and best of luck!
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Thank you for the comment!
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
Funny you should mention nightmares in your comments. While I was reading it reminded me of one of those dreams where you can't scream or no one can hear ya.
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thanks bout the comment
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i like it good job babe
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