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Eternal

I am just what I was before-still me;
I'm keeping all the things I kept.
So now think of all the thoughtless,
Complex in it's complexity.

I'm freedom, tied to being free,
I'm taking back all that I left.
I am so tired of this tiredness!...
And positive in positivity...

I've seen, so far, all that I'll see,
And from expecting, I expect
To end for me all of the endless,
And dignify my dignity.

I am all that I can be,
And as defined as I can get.
So weird in my weirdness...
Eternal in eternity.

Author notes

A little something that makes me like this poem is the special rhyme.
Supposing a stanza is A-B-C-D, all the A's rhyme, so do all the B's, so all the C's rhyme, and all the D's as well. If you understood what I meant . I hope you don't find this formula rocky...

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  • Sinnastarr silver member
    October 20, 2007

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    This was a very well writen piece. great form. I love the way it read. I liked the stanza,
    "I'm freedom, tied to being free,
    I'm taking back all that I left.
    I am so tired of this tiredness!...
    And positive in positivity..."
    Well done.
    I see why this poem has allready won an honorable trophy.
    Thank you so much for entering my contest and I wish you the best of luck on your quest for an upgraded award.

  • Sinnastarr silver member
    August 26, 2007
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    This was a very good write. I enjoyed the A-B-C-D formula you used. All and all a good read. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck to you.


  • tlburris
    April 3, 2007
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    Very good write. I loved it. Short but good!


  • Lady-Pegasus
    April 2, 2007
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    Thank you for your contest submission as well as for following the rules. Oh this is fine, I have employed that form and similar ones myself. This is a wonderful deep poem that is very uniquely written, well done. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *


  • MissStranger
    March 28, 2007

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    EXCELLENT!both style and structure!hmmm...i cannot remember the name of this special type of rhymming...hmmmm...you mastered it truly!eternity is yours,Vi!well done!


  • willowprincess
    March 26, 2007

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    beautiful, and absolutely genius on the rhyme scheme. i especially love the D's of each stanza. i love it.

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