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guilty

 

chaos captured within;

the gaunt guise of darkness-

locked behind the red rush of

his emptied eyes.

 

the world winds down,

to tides of torments tripped

along the shorelines of sorrows;

he'd watched dwindle & die

in technicolor terrors

of his past.

 

would it end?

 

with time, which ticks & licks

the color from his captured soul-

slivered into prickled pieces

of reality & the dance of

it's dares of deception.

 

self-inflicted punishments,

providing the cold coffin-

in which you might hide

your grinding guilt...

 

"I'm sorry-"

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Vincent. Final Fantasy 7 + Dirge of Cereberus

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  • Tarja
    October 9, 2007

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    Okay seriously... the judge was totally right by rewarding you the gold... this is without a doubt the best piece for Vincent I have ever seen on this sight. .... I almost wanna ask you if I can print this... but I have never done that before... So I won't start now.. but seriously... you took my breath away with how much this just 100% reflected Vincent's anguish.... ah... BRAVO!


  • DancingRed
    April 6, 2007

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    I don't know anything about Final Fantasy, but what I do know is that you write awesomeness for poetry. Lovely alliteration, all the D's and G's add to the darker atmosphere.

    DancingRed.


  • Tekno Suicide
    March 29, 2007
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    I'm speechless...o.o


  • Dolphin Shaktiheart
    March 27, 2007
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    Omega will Rise

    Hopefully I have enough hi-potions and limit breakers.


  • Raven Tears gold member
    March 26, 2007

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    I agree with grrl shadow.
    Mmmm you made him ten times hotter than what he already is!! LOL
    It felt like in your write that we are standing by him experiencing his thoughts and emotions with him.
    I'm up for that one!!
    Well done, nice write.


  • grrlshadow
    March 26, 2007

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    OH MAN YOU ARE AWESOMENESS!!! This is PERFECT Vincent!! you have just become one of my best friends "with time, which ticks & licks

    the color from his captured soul-

    slivered into prickled pieces

    of reality & the dance of

    it's dares of deception.



    self-inflicted punishments,

    providing the cold coffin-

    in which you might hide

    your grinding guilt..."

    this just blew me away!!! thank you SO MUCH for this entry, and best of luck to you in the contest! you rock!!

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