my heart walked out the door
only loud enough to bleed
crack of a smile
shattered calm
breaking the shell
opening up where the dark thoughts dwell
the shard of happiness
lodges itself firm
deep enough to kill
blood rains down
the air escapes
the dam breaks
the heart quakes
splits then breaks
mistakes spill from within
clouded in confusion and doubt
no way out no way to win
it all sucks in
pressing goodness down
bringing darkness to the crown
tears escape
sadness across a soul drapes
A contest entry
- heartbreak by live in love.
500 points, ended November 8, 2007, 56 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - What Hurts The Most by Ignis Corpus.
750 points, ended April 20, 2008, 58 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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this poem is simply splendid though if at all possable you could change the colors on it that would amazing because they are so harsh it hurts my eyes to look at this poem. as for the poem it's self it is soo powerful and it hold your attention to the end and leaves you to want more it is increadibly descriptive and the emotions it leaves you with are very intense to say the least, thank you for entering ther contest and wish you the best of luck blessed be
lil
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Wowzer!!!
The background hits you like a punch!! It is very distracting making it difficult for me to concentrate on the poem. What I did manage to read is superb, but I couldn't finish it sorry. Best of luck in the contest!
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