The familiar sound of heels clicking.
I looked up.
There she was.
Standing in the middle of the cafe.
Shaking her umbrella.
She looked around.
Slowly her sunglasses were peeled away from her face.
She froze when she saw me.
I still can't recall if she smiled or not.
I crossed my legs.
Uncrossed them.
Crossed them again.
She sat with me.
Silence.
The waiter came up.
She immediately shook her head no.
We sipped our water.
A loud crash came from the back.
Broken dishes.
Startled silence.
She put the glasses back on.
Her eyes suddenly hidden.
I've always been forced to connect
With sunglasses.
I created my own world in the reflection.
My mother in the sunglasses loved me.
My mother with the glasses off
Did not.
Her blonde hair was curled.
She's a natural brunette.
I haven't seen her brunette
Since I was ten.
Another crash.
Just in time.
I couldn't bear to look at her anymore.
Why couldn't she be herself?
Apparently a drunk waiter.
FIRED.
I turned to her again.
The glasses were off.
Off.
She looked at me.
Her eyes glowed.
Blue.
Beautiful blue eyes.
I was drowning in them.
I looked away.
She sighed.
I slowly peeled my eyes away
From the stained tile.
She was smiling.
I was shaking.
Sweating.
"I am pregnant."
She said something at last.
A contest entry
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1350 points, ended April 2, 2007, 13 entries
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Comments
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Beautiful write, I love the small parts of humour included. Definetly a surprise ending, didn't see that coming here. Great piece, thank you for the entry
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Good Build Up...
I loved how you built up to the final disclosure of the mother being pregnant. The sunglasses thing was good...how she hid behind her sunglasses and the daughter sees herself reflected in them.
"I created my own world in the reflection.
My mother in the sunglasses loved me.
My mother with the glasses off
Did not."
It was interesting that the mother and daughter connected in the end, (with the sunglasses off), and the mother finally reveals to her daughter that she is pregnant. I like the way your write built up to that and the interesting interplay with the sunglasses...
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