You lie, for spring has yet to spread her wings,
So stoical, so cruel your prompting word,
For winter laughs, enjoying her last fling,
And through the trees a howling wind is heard.
You mock me sir for I would have the sun,
Its silken kisses on my bronzing skin,
But spring the gauntlet still with winter runs,
You speak of summer, you should feel chargrin.
Tonight in torment in my dreams I'll turn,
To search dark realms to find the summer's sun,
But with the dawn I'll look with eyes most stern,
As with your mockery you have such fun.
And you would break a maiden's heart my friend
Full knowing winter still must reach its end.
A contest entry
- Rhyme and Flow part 1 Summertime - 50,000 points series by cricketjeff.
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the subtle teasing banter like two lovers from a slower time. this runs of the tongue and leave a smile on the face as winter plays its last tricks stretching into spring... a great read well done..
Cyber Artist
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"There's not enough coffee to go around a slow moving brain" (in reference of my mind lol)
After re-reading this again, my mind finally wrapped itself around the season concept and I really liked this piece...full of imagery -
Life is so unfair!
We couldn't give out enough golds!!!
This is a gold winner every way I read it, but only gets an HM, thank-you for adding a wonderful poem to our best ever contest. We both hope the rest of the series will be even harder to mark but that you will walk off with a fair share of our trophies.
Wonderful.
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Yes ...
this is a helluva write. Congratulations on a job well done.
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sad, dark ,lovely
Here a lyrical tale of winter's last fling , how lovely you have weaved this , a masterful piece, a
conversation with the personified winter malice..
just loved this, full of feelings, of wanting the sun,
inspiring sonnet to learn from ..
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Very beautiful sonnet Di.
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How mean of him! I'll dream of summer with you, It seems like spring can't get off the ground this year.. grrrr... At least in the eastern US.
Great write, Di!
Jenn
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Wonderful..
I know Di.. if I switch o'er to ur works.. I'm in for something.. be it pleasure or pain.. you know to take us to the depth of it. Beautifully done.. as always.
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this was a fun read. my pen has taken a little break but I hope to have it all warmed up again soon.
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this reminds me of the weather here. Things start to bloom as though spring is really here and then we have a freeze and things die..winter is a cruel prankster..you write brilliant metapors. This was beautiful..though sad.
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it's a good poem di, there's some nice imagery, very well written indeed. very sorry again for what happened,
alex.
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