Days shaving away shorter.
Last nights of summer
cooling yet not biting...yet.
Moon getting bigger and redder losing
her pale cool yellow that bleeds into my heart.
Step with me through those last shades of green.
Walk with me always.
Don't be in the August
of your love.
A contest entry
- summer! open for ninety minutes, good prizes! by Floorboards.
600 points, ended March 25, 2007, 7 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A lovely poem that flows sweetly. I really like the message in the last line 'Don't be in the August of your love' . Nicely finished. Good luck in the contest.
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Thank you for your kind words! I'm getting closer to being happy with my work across the board.
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this is very well written with excellent imagery, thank you very much for entering the contest,
good luck,
floorboards.
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