I woke to the sound
Of a crying wolf
The truth lay in the trees;
Branches swayed violently
A feeling of terror, filling me;
There was no wind,
Not even a breeze..
I reached out for comfort
But she was gone
I could feel that,
Something was wrong
Nobody knew, who she was
Nobody knew, what she,
Meant to me,
I tried so hard to find her, I did,
They told me it was all, in my head
Oh, my sweet delusion
They don't believe, but I do
I'll be chasing after phantoms
All my life, if I have to
To prove you real, prove them wrong
To show that I've been right, all along..
I'll quench the fire taking you away,
Even if my life is the price I have to pay..
You were the world; Now it's falling apart,
Nobody remembers, but you were a central part,
Without you, it's done,
The 4 headed viper has won..
But not for long.
Author notes
This is about a book, called Chainfire, by Terry Goodkind, enjoy.
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nice write, i was kinda disappointed when i got to the end and read that the idea was actually from a book, made is seem less personal to be quite honest, but its well written and i completely related to it, what made you write about a book?
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Well, this particular series of books is really conceptual, and it has a lot of philosophies I really like..
And well, I loved the idea of that particular book, like how one day someone who had such an influence on everyone isn't there, and only the main character can remember her... and every change anyone ever had because of her is gone.. etc.
It wasn't really about the plot of the book but about his desperation to get her back, and his frustration at the others who keep trying to tell him she doesn't exist.
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This poem has such intensity and an all-around "haunted" feel to it. You captured the mood so quickly within that first stanza. It hooked me immediately when I started reading it...the title had initially grabbed me, but that first stanza kept me there.
"The truth lay in the trees;
Branches swayed violently
A feeling of terror, filling me;
There was no wind,
Not even a breeze."
I liked that part of the first stanza because it's kind of contradicting itself in a way. The swaying branches within a night with no wind. It gave it a surreal and nightmarish feel right away. Awesome play with words right there.
As for the rest? It kept the same feel, and the poem presented itself awesomely. Great write!
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ohhhh...very excited. I like the way you chose to write this with excruciatingly carefully thought out details. This was really good. I really liked this one alot. I'm tempted to go out and buy the book now.
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