My mind,
the garden of my thoughts
Where many beautiful plants grow
intermingled with the weeds
Each thought, a seed that I sow
Each smile, a ray of sunlight
Each tear, like nourishing rain
Cleansing my heart and soul
Washing away my pain.
Author notes
A contest entry
- Calling all Poets for Poetry #2 (minamal pre-writes allowed) by Dark Whispers.
315 points, ended March 29, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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a good piece, though i thought the author notes are not really needed here as you just repeat what you have said in the poem itself
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this is a nice poem and i really enjoyed it because i can really relate I believe everyone can. great entry and good luck in the contest.
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What a wonderful write!!! I love the last three lines, this is so true for me. What a great metaphor...it seems I get rid of one weed and two more take it's place...damn weeds! This is truely a great piece. Bravo!!!
Whyitt U
xxx
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you amaze everytime
well done love this sums everytrhing up in so few lines bravo hun.. hugs jeannette.
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Just wanted to swing by, take a quick look at your poem, and wish you good luck. I liked this a lot and think you've done a great job in so few lines. Not every thought and idea can be a beautiful flower, but I've no doubt the garden of your mind has a LOT more flowers than weeds.
Best wishes,
~J.
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ahhh I enjoyed this piece very much since I think of my mind as a garden of thoughts, a garden where both good and evil are found. Lovely form and flow and quite captivating is the emotion in this piece. The metaphor is well defined as well. Excellent. Bunny
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Lovely work! This is a great metaphor for the emotions we feel inside. Beautiful piece!
~Lori
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this is a good poem and is an interesting way at looking at things well done i liked this a fair bit kepp writing j
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love it . .
tesse, so fertile is your beautiful mind
that all things planted grow there in time
yes, even the weeds realize they find
a place to live by your word-vines, entwined
poet
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This conjures colourful Imagery... and sensitive emotion all with in so few words. This is a pleasure to read... a soothing... calm poem.Thankyou for sharing such lovely thoughts with us.
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nicely done, fine imagery and tender emotion. a great effort in few words and under time constraints.
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Very interesting metaphor. This is quite a fascinating and well done poem for such a few words. Great job.
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Perfect!
I was captured by line 2 and loved the whole analogy right to the end of poem. Well penned and well enjoyed .. I think I will bookmark this one
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