Do you see the path of love
As it reaches from above
Steps of hope within the blue
Glisten in the morning dew
Flowers dance on every rung
Echoe's of a love once sung
Serenading to your heart
Gives your life chance to re-start
As it hovers in the air
Speaking of a love so rare
Take a step so you can see
Once again you can soar free
Can you feel a lovers kiss?
Reaching from the one you miss
Tendrils drift around your soul
Capture it, and make it whole
Now you walk the path of love
Put your hand in hope's fresh glove
Gliding within heaven's stream
Once again you start to dream
Feel connection, with the skies
Do not try to analyze
Feel the one who used to be
Join you in destiny
A contest entry
- PICTURE INSPIRATION by Darc Soul.
450 points, ended April 11, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A really beautiful poem you have written here. It's full of elegance and a beauty that is found in your words. Lovely verbiage and great use of imagery.
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omgosh!
this is the most beautiful poem i have ever read. it flows together so well and it feel so pure. good write, very well done!
~Brooke
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Lovely write with a wonderful rhythm and rhyme, just a delightful expression of love and all we feel if we are luckyenough to be in love.
Love, C
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Brilliant Write!
What a beautiful write! Takes me on a journey into the essense of love and the renewal of lost love. Imagery is fantastic. Captivating my friend, Don
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Great work
It has a great flow and it's definitely got meaning. It's hard to keep a love poem going, in my opinion, but you pulled it off. And it isn't exactly a mushy-kiss-kiss love poem, now, is it?
Add rhyming to that... just, wow. It is hard to get your point across while bound to the scheme of rhyming, isn't it? But you've got it. You've definitely got it.
Loved the second stanza the most:
"Flowers dance on every rung
Echoe's of a love once sung
Serenading to your heart
Gives your life chance to re-start"
Keep it up.
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Very original
Wow, it's amazing that you can come up with this by watching that picture. I think it's good you didn't go with the stairway to heaven theme. You keep it fresh!
I did have to read it quite a few times before I treully understood. That might be becouse of my limited English vocabulary.
I really like the structure though.
Well done.
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