look at her dress
it is dirty and torn
though she lowers her eyes
she can still feel your scorn
just a child
needing love
A contest entry
- Pre-write challenge! by Lady Michaella.
485 points, ended February 20, 66 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow.... this is so sad...
and very well written. you get brownie points for using the world 'Scorn' i love that word
thanks for entering my contest!
and best of luck to you!!
your judge,
-Lemon Bee-
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HEART BREAKING
So many as yourself grows with out love and understanding...Just a child needing love
This brings tears to my eyes to know you grew up without the love and yet you are gifted with such wonderful words
and a heart full of love
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Wow........wonderful. I know how very deep this was inside for you to "pull" out...
as always, you command the pen like a sword.
Love,
Your Princess.
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Wonderful writing
Wonderful, sad and very very deep. Such a small piece but very very powerful indeed. Deeply emotional. Wonderful writing.
Wayne
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Who is the girl in the photo honney bear? The picture is familiar. It is a disturbing write. But is well done.
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the child in the write and the photo is me.
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Jesus mate. I felt a shiver....
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A beautiful write having a sad touch to it. Depicts the truth of the world.
Thanks for your entry. Good luck in my contest!
Be Serene,
Spread Peace,
Harrisham Minhas.
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this is great... loved how you used the pic... and the message that is in this write... awesome ...
cheers
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this is wonderful, simple, and clean, good work!
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awwwwwwwwww
Sweet touching and somewhat sad. Yes it is true all children need love.
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short yet very beautiful....so glad ur my ap mumzie...u write so many wonderful poems
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