Did I ever tell you?
tell you...
you have your father's eyes.
what
have
I
done?
The Chaos within you, saved you
but it was the Chaos (saved you)
the Chaos within you
that took you from me...
took
you
I never told you
I was
afraid
...
remember our place?
beneath the tree...
remember?
I'm so sorry...
(you have your father's eyes...)
forgive
please
forgive me.
Vincent...
forgive
I was afraid...
I'm so sorry
Author notes
the category of games,
anyone who has played FF Dirge of Cerberus will get this...as well as any Final Fantasy VII fans...
A contest entry
- Two Options by IndividualEleven. by IndividualEleven.
850 points, ended May 13, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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That's where the cigarette part came from.
=]
South Park, my brother's friends Tim and Hunter (who, no joke, talk like that... and do it quite well.)
As well as stereotypical people in general.
And goths.
Just because...
They are...goths.
Hey.
I love goths.
I hang out with alot of goths.
I don't claim to be gothicy...
I do wear alot of black and listen to alot of deathly metal and such, and have some whacked out necklaces as well as some occult stuff.
But it's just the outside.
Not the personality.
=]
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well done, only saw the movie, never got the chance to play the game, but i did enjoy the style, could feel the emotions you put into this, well done! and thanks for entering - Jacen an IndividualEleven.
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really good
vincent is my second favorite character, i havent played DoC yet but i want to. your poem is really good. it really describes lucrecias feelings toward vincent.
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I have no idea what DoC is, only ever played 10.
However, I still think this poem is beautifully haunting.
It has a melodic, wind blown quality.
Much praise.
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DoC is the Final Fantasy VII game about Vincent Valentine...is an awesome game, you should check it out...after you play VII, or even watch Advent Children!
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wow i really like this...they are even in the disjointed text that DoC (dirge) had i really like it nice work
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thank you...the feel from DoC is what i was trying to accomplish with this...the disjointed way her words popped up on the screen..and the feeling behind them.
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just for fun i decided to enter :-)
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am glad you did!!!
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So beautiful.
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thank you
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I remember that cave.
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just about enough to make you cry, aye? poor Vincent...poor Lucrecia...*sigh*
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Your such a tease I felt every emotion in this one.
SOMEBODY wants to make one jealous.
He's so hot.
Nice poem aye? Well done.
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see? now you've got me thinking about being pixellated for an hour or two again...hehehehe..yes he is SOOO HOT!! hehe...
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Wow
This is unbelievably beautiful. I agree with you (From your contest) That Vincent is an awesome character, ^^
I love this poem, it flows so well, and i can see Lucrecia saying this to him from with in the crystal you see at the begining of DOC O.o
Well done, i love it
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thank you! i've wanted to write this for awhile now...
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Grrr darn stalker box
Darn commenty box that follows me on the screen didn't have an option to applaud! Well HA, I applaud ye anyway, take that evil pop box!!! muahahahaa.. uh heeh ... ha >< iloveyou*scurriesoff*
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i love you tooooooo!!!!!
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Sweet heart, first off, I would love this poem even if I had no idea whom the individuals you were speaking of. You convey the emotion easily and flawlessly. I love how it tumbles down, almost as if to keep the reader drawn in (I do that to few of my poems a bit too >.<) I love how you placed in Chaos, making me think of saving yet also sacrafise. The very thing that keeps you here is what keeps you from ***. I love it (oh and *** is not a bad word, is merely for you to place in your own personal noun you adore that you are kept away from ^ ^
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you're so awesome!! thank you oodles and here's some *huggles* for you, darling-little-sister-mine!!!!
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Ah Ah Hide the evidence!
Shhhh, she meant sinister someone'so heh, yeaaaa.. 
*whispers* don't let them know we're in kahoots, sheesh, next thing ya know you're gonna let them all know how we plan to take over the... uurrrr NOTHING! *sees lurkers watching* I shall find ye in random hours from now, iloveyou! *scurries off once more* dayumit where's the door... oh.. there it is heh.. ILOVEYOU!
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